Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrate the number of participants for five activities at on social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

According to the graph the most number of participants that increases over the time are in table tennis and least number of participants that decreases over the time are in amateur.

The number of participants for for film club is in between 60 to 70 through out the time period from 2000 to 2020.while for Martial arts the number of participants is between 30 to 40 through the time period. For amateur dramatics the number of participants increases from 2000 to 2005. From 2005 to onwards the participants decreases constantly and at the end of 2020 it participants are less than 10.

Table tennis has highest number of participants in 2000 is has less than 20 participant and at 2005 to 2010 it has 20 participants and then at then end of 2020 it has less than 60 members. musical performance has no part participants till 2005 and then at the end of 2020 it has approximately 20 members

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant patterns, including the film club remaining around 60–70, amateur dramatics falling to below 10, and musical performances starting at zero and rising. However, the overview is unclear and includes an inaccurate claim: amateur dramatics does not have the lowest participation throughout, since musical performances begin at zero. The statement that table tennis has the “highest number” in 2000 is also incorrect; it starts below 20, while the film club is highest. Some key comparisons are missing, especially the film club’s consistently high figures and table tennis’s sharp rise to become the second-largest activity by 2020. Select the main trends accurately and summarise them clearly before giving supporting details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to a general statement and then descriptions of individual activities. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is uneven: the overview is difficult to interpret, and the final paragraph combines table tennis and musical performances without a clear comparison or consistent sequence. Linking phrases such as “According to the graph” and “then” are repeated or used mechanically, while the transition “from 2005 to onwards” is unclear. Grouping the activities by trend—for example, stable figures, rising figures and declining figures—would make the comparisons easier to follow. Use clear paragraph roles and connect each detail to the overview.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “increases,” “decreases,” and “approximately,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “the most number,” “participants are less than 10,” and “no part participants.” The repeated use of “number of participants” also makes the description less concise. Use precise trend language and natural collocations, such as “the figure rose,” “participation declined,” or “the total stood at.” Check activity names carefully and use “musical performances” consistently. These improvements would make the data description clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, and some relationships between years and trends can be understood. However, errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The line graph illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “at one social center” is missing an article before “social centre.” The sentence beginning “Table tennis has highest number of participants in 2000 is has…” contains faulty clause structure, and “it participants are less than 10” has an unclear subject and verb pattern. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “2020.while.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence structures before attempting longer comparisons.

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