Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graph illustrates the comparative analysis of number of participants for 5 distinctive activities taking place at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia over the period of of 2 decades commencing from 2000.

Overall, table tennis and musical performances faced significant inclines, while amateur dramatics suffered gradual decline. Film club and martial art attendees almost remained same, with no noticeable fluctuation, over the years.

In terms of table tennis, it started from around 15 members in 2000 with a minor increase in 2005 to 20 and then a dramatic and rapid jump reported from 2010 to 2020 to above 50 participants. Similarly, musical performance was with 0 performers slowly progressing to approximately 12 apprentice in 2010, with minor rise to 20 members in the next decade.

In contrast, amateur dramatics initially consisted nearly 30 attendees in 2000 but suffered gradual drops from 2005 and stopped at less than 10 learners in 2020.Furthermore, film club with initial above 60 participants and martial arts with about 36 members faced no such dramatic fluctuation, ending at almost the same numbers in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

The response identifies the main patterns accurately: table tennis and musical performances rise, amateur dramatics declines, and film club and martial arts remain comparatively stable. It also supports these points with relevant figures, such as table tennis increasing from about 15 to above 50 and amateur dramatics ending below 10. This gives a clear account of the graph’s key features. Some descriptions are slightly imprecise or over-generalised: table tennis rises sharply mainly after 2010, rather than simply “from 2010 to 2020,” and musical performances reach about 18, not 20. The overview could also make the final ranking clearer, particularly that film club remains highest while table tennis becomes second. More precise comparisons would strengthen an otherwise well-focused summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised into a clear introduction, overview and two detail paragraphs. The grouping is logical: the rising activities are discussed together, followed by the declining and relatively stable series. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “Similarly” and “In contrast” help signal these relationships, and the reader can follow the main progression. To make the flow more polished, ensure each comparison is expressed precisely: “Similarly” links two rising series, but their starting points and rates of growth differ substantially. The final paragraph also combines the decline and stable trends, so a clearer transition between these groups would help. Minor spacing and punctuation issues, such as the missing space after “2020.”, slightly interrupt the presentation.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

There is a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “significant inclines,” “gradual decline,” “dramatic and rapid jump” and “fluctuation.” These choices make the overall direction of change clear, and the response avoids repeating only basic terms such as “go up” and “go down.” However, some collocations and word choices are not natural for this chart: participants do not “face” an incline, and “apprentice” does not describe people attending musical performances. “Distinctive activities” and “comparative analysis of number” are also unnecessarily awkward. Aim for conventional data-reporting language and use “participants” consistently rather than switching among “members,” “performers,” “attendees” and “learners.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and more complex structures, including the contrast clause “while amateur dramatics suffered gradual decline” and the sentence beginning “In contrast.” Most meanings remain clear. Some grammatical errors and awkward constructions persist, however. The introduction has a repeated “of” and is missing an article in “comparative analysis of number”; “Film club and martial art attendees almost remained same” also needs more accurate article and verb phrasing. In the musical-performances sentence, the structure shifts awkwardly from “was with 0” to “progressing,” making the relationship between the figures less controlled. Review articles, singular/plural forms and sentence boundaries, especially the missing space after the full stop before “Furthermore.”

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