Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The rendered line graph illustrates number of participants for different activities at single social centre in melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

The data is calibrated in numbers.

overall, the proportion of participants increased in all five activities over the period. Film club had the highest number of participants for most of the period. Whereas inverse could be seen in the table tennis until 2020.

In 2000,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and gives an overview, but it does not adequately summarise the main features. The claim that participation “increased in all five activities” is inaccurate: film-club numbers dipped before rising, martial arts fluctuated, and amateur dramatics fell substantially from about 26 to 6. You correctly note that the film club had the highest figures for most of the period, and that table tennis changed markedly, but the comparison is unfinished and no supporting figures are reported. The response also stops after “In 2000,” leaving the task largely incomplete. It is 83 words below the required minimum. To improve, complete the report and select key trends with accurate comparisons and approximate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introduction is followed by an overview, and “Whereas” signals a contrast. However, the progression is not sustained because the final paragraph begins “In 2000,” and then stops, so the reader receives no detailed account of the data. The overview’s contrast about table tennis is also unclear: “inverse could be seen in the table tennis until 2020” does not explain what changed or how it compares with other activities. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect comparisons explicitly—for example, contrast table tennis’s strong rise with the decline in amateur dramatics.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “activities,” “period,” and “highest number,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited, and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural: “The data is calibrated in numbers” does not clearly describe the graph, while “inverse could be seen in the table tennis” is difficult to interpret. “Proportion” is also not the best term for figures showing participant numbers. Use precise trend language such as “the number of participants,” “fluctuated,” “declined steadily,” and “rose sharply.” Check spelling and capitalisation as well, including “Melbourne.” More varied, accurate vocabulary would make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response contains some understandable simple sentences, such as “Film club had the highest number of participants for most of the period,” but grammatical control is uneven and the range is narrow. The opening omits articles in “illustrates number of participants” and “at single social centre”; a more accurate form is “illustrates the number of participants at a single social centre.” The sentence beginning “Whereas” is a dependent clause presented as a sentence fragment, and “In 2000,” is left incomplete. Capitalisation and punctuation also need attention, particularly the lowercase “overall” after a full stop. Practise complete sentences and use a mix of simple and complex structures, checking articles, clause boundaries, and sentence endings.

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