Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line grapgh summaries to given information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the 2000 between 2020.

Overall, the number of participants is amateur dramatics decline sharply while film clubwas most popular activity throughout the period.

In 2000 the film club had about 64 participants, the highest figures the number remain stable until 2010 at around 62, before raising to nearly 70 in 2020 . Material art was the second most popular activity with participants flucting between started in 32 and 39 people over the 20 years .

In contrast, Amateur dramatics started about 27 participants in 2000 ans increase slightly to 29 in 2005 ,but fell continously decrease to only 6 pepole in 2020 becoming the least popular.

Table tennies show the impressive increase . it had only 16 participant in 2000 whicvh double to 20 in 2010 and then aurged to 37 in 2015 and 57 in 2020 overtaking all other activites wxpect the film club

Finally , musical performance has no participant in 2000 and 2005 but 2010 was introduced its popularity grew from 11 to 19 participants by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response selects the main patterns and gives a clear overview: film club remains the leading activity, amateur dramatics declines markedly, and table tennis rises strongly. It also covers all five activities and supports these points with figures, such as film club at about 64 initially and amateur dramatics falling to 6. Most reported trends match the chart. However, some details are inaccurate: film club is around 60 in 2010 and reaches about 66 in 2020, rather than remaining near 62 until 2010 and rising to nearly 70; table tennis ends at about 54, not 57. The claim that musical performances were “introduced” in 2010 is also not established by the graph; it only shows zero participants earlier. More precise reporting would strengthen an otherwise well-selected summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs grouping the activities. Its progression is generally logical, and transitions such as “In contrast” and “Finally” help signal changes of focus. This gives the reader a clear route through the main trends. However, cohesion is not consistently controlled: the table-tennis paragraph begins with a lower-case “it” after a full stop, and several sentences run together or use punctuation awkwardly, making relationships between details less smooth. The overview also combines two trends in a sentence that is grammatically difficult to follow. To improve, use complete, clearly punctuated sentences and organise related comparisons together, while retaining the useful paragraph structure and signposting already present.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “popular,” “decline,” “increase,” and “overtaking,” and it attempts to describe change rather than simply list figures. However, the range and control are limited, with frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word forms that can distract or make meaning harder to follow: “grapgh,” “flucting,” “continously,” and “aurged” are examples. Some collocations are also unnatural, such as “the impressive increase” and “its popularity grew” when describing participant numbers. Aim for accurate, conventional trend language and check spelling carefully. More precise choices such as “rose sharply,” “fluctuated between,” and “fell steadily” would make the account clearer and more appropriate to an academic graph summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a mixture of simple and more complex structures, including “before raising to nearly 70” and a contrast introduced by “In contrast.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur in sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and punctuation. For example, “the number of participants is amateur dramatics decline sharply” does not form a clear grammatical sentence, while “the number remain stable” lacks subject–verb agreement. The table-tennis section also contains a sentence fragment after “Table tennies show the impressive increase.” These problems sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to understand. Practise building accurate sentences around a clear subject and verb, and use past-tense forms consistently for the completed period, such as “rose,” “fell,” and “remained.”

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