Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph compares the number of participants for five different activities at social centre in Melbourne, Australia during the years 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the number of participants for film club were highest for all the time period. Moreover, number of participants for all the clubs increased till the end of 2020 except for Amateur dramatics which faced decline.

For musical performance, there were no participants initially till the year 2005. Afterwards it experienced a gradual increase from around 10 to about 20 participants till the end of 2020. However, participants for table tennis were around 15 intially which increased slightly to 20 till the end of 2010 whereas it rose sharply to 55 approximately till the year 2020. Amateur dramatics was the only club were number of participants fell drastically from around 25 to around 5 till the end of 2020 despite of slight increase in figure during 2005.

The figures of Martial arts club flucuated along the period from 2000 to 2020. Initially there were around 35 participants which increased slightly to around 40 till the end of 2020. At last, the participants for film club were greater for all the years from 2000 to 2020. Initially there were around 65 participants which increased slightly to 70 till the end of 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main series and several important trends: film club remains the largest, table tennis rises markedly, and amateur dramatics declines. The overview also attempts to compare the activities, and most reported figures are broadly consistent with the chart. However, the claim that “all the clubs increased till the end of 2020 except” amateur dramatics is inaccurate: martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s rather than showing an overall rise, and film club dips before recovering. The film club ends at about 66, not 70. Your account of table tennis and amateur dramatics is more fully developed than that of martial arts. More precise overview statements and accurate endpoint comparisons would provide the additional clarity needed for a stronger response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the activities. Information is generally grouped sensibly, and sequencing phrases such as “Afterwards” and “Initially” help readers follow changes over time. However, some linking is mechanical or repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “till the end of 2020” and “At last,” which does not introduce a useful final comparison. The overview’s broad claim about increases also conflicts with the later description of martial arts as fluctuating. Improve progression by grouping the main upward trends together, then contrasting them with the stable or declining series, and use clearer references to specific years.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “gradual increase,” “rose sharply,” “fluctuated,” and “decline,” which helps describe different patterns. Some choices are imprecise or repetitive, however: “number of participants for” is repeated, and “greater” is less natural than “higher” when comparing figures. There are also spelling errors, including “intially” and “flucuated,” and “clubs” is not always the most accurate label for the activities shown. Aim for more precise collocations such as “participant numbers,” “remained relatively stable,” and “fell steadily,” while checking spelling and avoiding repeated wording. These improvements would make the description more fluent and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “despite,” and the main meaning is generally clear. Some grammatical errors remain. For example, “at social centre” needs an article, and “the number of participants … were highest” has a subject–verb agreement problem. In “the only club were number of participants fell,” the relative structure and article are incorrect; “despite of” also uses an incorrect pattern. Several sentences rely on long chains of time phrases, which makes their structure less controlled. Practise accurate articles, agreement, and relative clauses, and divide longer descriptions into clearer sentences. Greater consistency in these areas would strengthen the range you already attempt.

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