Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph shows information about the number of participants for different activities such as Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, Musical performances at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, Film club had highest participants in all years. Table tennis shows rapid growth and it is second highest participants in 2020. Amateur dramatics shows decline in number of participants and it had lowest patricipants in 2020.

Film club had 65 participant in year 2000 it slightly go down in 2010 by 60 participant the it again go up in year 2020 by 65. Martial art had 35 participants in 2000 it shows gradual fluctuation between 30 and 35 but in year 2020 it had 35 participants. Amateur dramatics had 25 participants in 2000 is increased by 3 participants in 2005 by 28 participants then it shows constant decline in the number of participants in 2020 they decline form 28 to 5 participants .

Table tennis had 15 participant in 2000 it slichtly increase by 17 in 2010 then is show huge growth by 50 participants in 2020. Musical performances had 0 participants in 2000 and 2005 by 2010 it had 10 participants it slightly increase by 15 in 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main patterns accurately: the film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises sharply, and amateur dramatics declines to the lowest level. The overview is relevant, and most reported figures are close to the chart, including the film club’s fall to about 60 before recovering and the table-tennis increase to roughly 50. This covers the task well, but some details are incomplete or imprecise. For example, table tennis is about 20 in both 2005 and 2010, rather than showing a steady increase to 17 by 2010, and its 2020 figure is closer to 54. Musical performances reach about 18 in 2020, not 15. More precise comparisons and coverage of the intermediate years would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a summary of the main trends, and separate paragraphs describing the activities. This makes the information easy to locate, and the grouping of film club, martial arts and amateur dramatics before the remaining activities is sensible. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is sometimes weakened by long strings of clauses joined with “it” or “then,” as in the film-club and martial-arts descriptions. Some links are also mechanical, and the final paragraph ends without a concluding comparison. Use clearer sentence boundaries and vary linking expressions to show contrast and change over time. For example, contrast the sharp rise in table tennis with the decline in amateur dramatics.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “decline,” “fluctuation,” and “growth,” and the activity names are generally handled clearly. This gives you enough language to communicate the main trends, but the range and control are uneven. Several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “had highest participants,” “shows rapid growth,” and “it slightly increase.” There are also spelling errors, including “patricipants,” “form,” and “slichtly,” which reduce accuracy. Choose more natural collocations for describing figures and trends, and check spelling carefully. Using alternatives such as “the number of participants,” “rose sharply,” and “fell steadily” would make the report more precise and less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to describe changes across time and use some connected clauses, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined together without reliable control. Errors occur in verb forms and agreement: “it slightly go down,” “it shows gradual fluctuation,” and “it slightly increase” need forms such as “went down,” “showed,” and “increased.” Articles and plurals are also inconsistent in phrases such as “had 65 participant” and “had highest participants.” Several sentences run together, particularly the descriptions of film club and martial arts, making relationships between ideas less clear. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences with consistent past-tense verbs, then add a few accurate complex sentences to compare trends.

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