Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants in five different activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.

Overall Film club is the most popular activity with a slight fluctuations in this years according to the graph its starting with 64 people in 2000 and despite some fluctuations it remained at a similar level in 2020. After that table tennis is the second most popular activity in 2000 number of People were 25 but graph drop from 2005 to 2010 by make the real value of 19 people only but after that it jumps to 60 by 2020.

Martial arts and amateur dramatic were quite close in 2000 and even in 2005 on people of 2 only was the differences but later on martial arts fluctuated over the period but amateur dramatics fall down by reaching to 5 people only in 2020.

Finally, musical performances had no participants in 2000 and 2005, but the figure climbed to 12 in 2010 and continued rising to approximately 18 by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall pattern: film club remains the leading activity, table tennis rises strongly, amateur dramatics declines, and musical performances grow from zero. Several figures and comparisons, however, do not match the graph. Table tennis starts at about 16, not 25, and rises to about 54, not 60; it does not drop between 2005 and 2010, remaining around 20. Amateur dramatics ends at about 6, close to your estimate, while martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s. The comparison that martial arts and amateur dramatics were close initially is relevant, but the difference was about 10 participants in 2000, not two. A more accurate overview and carefully selected figures would make the report more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph covering the leading activities, a comparison of martial arts and amateur dramatics, and a final point about musical performances. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the information. However, some connections between ideas are awkward or unclear, particularly “After that table tennis is the second most popular activity in 2000,” which makes the time reference and comparison difficult to follow. The overview is also embedded in a long paragraph rather than clearly separated from supporting details. Use clearer paragraphing and linking phrases, and organise the body by meaningful trends or groups. This would strengthen progression and make comparisons easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “fluctuations,” “remained,” “climbed,” and “continued rising,” and these choices help communicate changes over time. There is some variety in how you describe movement, but several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “graph drop,” “it jumps to 60,” and “fall down.” “Most popular” is understandable, though “highest number of participants” is more precise for a graph. Capitalisation is inconsistent in “People,” and “amateur dramatic” is not the correct activity label. Aim for accurate collocations and consistent terminology, especially when describing rises, falls, and stable figures. More precise wording would improve clarity without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses linked with “but” and “despite,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to process. For example, “Overall Film club is the most popular activity with a slight fluctuations” has faulty agreement and punctuation, while “its starting with 64 people” uses an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “After that table tennis…” also lacks clear grammatical structure, and “by reaching to 5 people” is not formed correctly. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries. Building accurate shorter sentences first, then combining them selectively, would help you express comparisons more clearly.

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