Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The supplied line chart illustrate, the numerical data of the players who take part in the various activities at social centre in Melbourne,Australia from 2000 to 2020 year.

At a first glance, there were 5 activities in the chart which clearly depicts the highest participants from film club. While amateur dramatics faced fall after 2005.

To begin with the film club with 65 participants and stayed the same through out the years till 2020. Further, the martial arts participant were on the second place in year 2000 with around 38 participants. It can be seen that the amateur dramatics were gaining participants till 2005 but drastic fall has been notice from [redacted phone].

However, in table tannis game there were almost 18 participants were mention inyear 2000 and after the year 2010 they were rise to 53. Moreover there were lower participants showed in musical activity from 0 to 19 in [redacted phone].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s five activities and correctly note that the film club had the highest participation and amateur dramatics declined after 2005. You also capture the strong rise in table tennis and the later appearance of musical performances. However, the account is only partially developed: the film-club figure is described as staying the same, although it dips slightly before rising, and the martial-arts figures are not summarised across the period. The overview is also brief and does not clearly compare the main changes, such as table tennis becoming the second-largest activity by 2020 while amateur dramatics fell to the lowest level. Select the most important trends and report them accurately, with a few supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from a short overview to descriptions of individual activities, and phrases such as “To begin with” and “Moreover” show an attempt to connect information. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the overview is followed by a film-club detail, then martial arts and amateur dramatics, before the final paragraph shifts to table tennis and musical performances. Some linking is mechanical or confusing, particularly “However” where no clear contrast is established. Paragraphing and sentence boundaries also make the relationships between points harder to follow. Grouping the activities by trend—for example, stable or fluctuating figures versus rising and falling figures—and using clear comparisons would create a more coherent progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “drastic fall,” and “gaining participants,” so the reader can generally understand the topic and trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “the numerical data of the players,” “were on the second place,” and “lower participants showed.” Spelling and word formation also reduce precision in “table tannis” and “inyear.” These errors do not prevent the main message from being understood, but they make the description less natural and occasionally unclear. Use standard terms such as “number of participants,” “ranked second,” and “participation fell,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer structures, including “It can be seen that…” and a clause beginning “while,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and some complex attempts are faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in examples such as “The supplied line chart illustrate” and “the martial arts participant were.” There are also incomplete or awkward sentence structures, including “Further, the martial arts participant were on the second place…” and “there were almost 18 participants were mention.” Articles, punctuation, and sentence boundaries are inconsistent as well. These problems sometimes make the reader pause to interpret the meaning. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build comparisons with controlled structures such as “while X rose, Y declined.”

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