Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrates the amount of people those who are took part in many kinds of activities at the social center in Melbourne, Australia during the time between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club remained the most popular activity throughout the period, while table tennis experienced the most significant growth. In contrast, amateur dramatics saw a marked decline. Martial arts fluctuated slightly, whereas musical performances increased gradually from zero participants.

The film club stood at 64 million in 2000 but marked a decrese in 2010 and stood at 60 million. Then again marked a significant increase and reach 68 million in 2020. Besides, table tennis also had steadily increased amd reach 17 million in 2005. Than experienced a upword trend and rapidly increased in 54 million in 2020. While amateur dramatics experienced a opposite trend to table tennis. It significantly decreased 17 million to 6 million in 2000 to 2020.

Martial arts was 37 million and it experienced a flactuation, and still stood at 37 million in 2020. And the final one is musical performances which stood at 0 from 2000 to 2005. But it had a siginficant increase from 2005 and reach 18 million in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main patterns accurately in the overview: film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises strongly, amateur dramatics declines, and musical performances grow from zero. You also cover all five activities, so the response addresses the task. However, several figures are inaccurate or unclear: the chart shows participants, not “million”; film club ends at about 66, not 68, and amateur dramatics falls from about 26 to 6, rather than 17 to 6. Some series are only briefly described, and the account of martial arts gives its starting and ending values but not its fluctuations. Use approximate participant numbers consistently and develop the key comparisons more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. The overview effectively previews the main trends, and linking expressions such as “In contrast” and “Besides” help connect comparisons. However, the detail paragraphs move between activities without a fully consistent grouping, and some transitions are awkward or incomplete, as in “While amateur dramatics experienced a opposite trend.” The final paragraph also begins “And the final one,” which sounds conversational and does not create a smooth progression. Grouping rising, falling, and relatively stable series more deliberately, then using clear references and transitions, would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of trend vocabulary, including “remained the most popular,” “marked decline,” “fluctuated slightly,” and “gradually.” These choices communicate the broad patterns and show some flexibility. However, spelling errors such as “decrese,” “flactuation,” and “siginficant” are noticeable, while several expressions are imprecise or unnatural: “amount of people,” “marked a significant increase,” and “increased in 54 million.” Repeated use of “stood” and “increase” also limits variety. Choose accurate collocations for chart descriptions, such as “the number of participants,” “rose to,” and “reached approximately,” and proofread spelling carefully. This would make the vocabulary more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including the overview’s contrast between activities and the clause “which stood at 0 from 2000 to 2005.” Meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. The opening phrase “the amount of people those who are took part” has faulty clause structure, and “during the time between 2000 to 2020” uses an incorrect preposition pattern. There are also problems with articles and agreement in “a opposite trend,” and tense or verb-form errors in “reach 68 million” and “had steadily increased.” Sentence fragments beginning “While” and “And” weaken control. Practise complete comparative sentences and consistent past-tense reporting, while checking articles and prepositions.

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