Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The Line graph elucidates the number of participants for multiple activities at one social centre located in Melbourne, Australia, for the period of time 2000 to 2020.
overall, the film club remains the top with most popular activity throughout the years. While table tennis and music's performance grew considerably. In contrast, amateur dramatics declined drastically, and martial arts stayed relatively stable over time.
On the one hand Film club attracted the most people and remained the most popular activity during the period [redacted phone]. Table tennis kept moderate growth till 2010, and then the popularity of table tennis got a significant growth till 2020. However, Martial arts maintained steady growth over the years and got an upward lift during the year 2010. Musical performances were also popular activities among the youth
On the other hand, amateur dramatics were looking stable, but fluctuations began during 2010, and till 2020 amateur dramatics became the least popular activity throughout the period.
In conclusion, the film club remained the most popular activity in Melbourne, Australia, while tabble tennis got a significant growth over the period. Amateur dramatics witnessed a bad downfall and became least popular activity in melbourne
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You identify the main overall patterns: the film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises substantially, and amateur dramatics declines to the lowest level. These are relevant and broadly accurate. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: martial arts fluctuates rather than showing “steady growth,” and musical performances begin at zero and rise from 2010, but this development is only briefly mentioned. The description of table tennis as growing moderately until 2010 is also imprecise, since it rises slightly and then stays level before its sharp increase. To strengthen the response, report a few key figures and compare the series more precisely, while developing the musical performances trend.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, body paragraphs and a concluding statement. The contrast between rising activities and declining amateur dramatics gives the reader a basic sense of organisation. However, progression is weakened by repeated points: the film club’s leading position and table tennis’s growth appear in both the overview and conclusion, while the final paragraph largely repeats earlier information. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” feel mechanical, and the first body paragraph groups several trends without a clear sequence. Organise the details into more purposeful comparisons, and use linking phrases only where they clarify relationships between trends.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “remained the most popular,” “grew considerably,” “declined drastically” and “relatively stable.” These phrases help communicate the main trends, and the meaning is generally clear. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise, however: “got a significant growth” and “got an upward lift” are not natural ways to describe a line graph, while “bad downfall” is informal and awkward. “Music’s performance” also does not accurately name the chart category, which is “musical performances.” Aim for precise trend language and check spelling, including “table tennis” and “Melbourne,” to improve control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast in “While table tennis and music’s performance grew considerably. In contrast, amateur dramatics declined drastically.” Most of the intended meaning can be understood, but some sentence construction and punctuation errors remain. The sentence beginning “While” is a fragment because it is not joined to a main clause. Capitalisation is inconsistent at the start of “overall,” and the final sentence lacks clear punctuation. There are also issues with articles and sentence completeness, such as “became least popular activity.” Review clause boundaries and article use, and proofread punctuation while retaining your attempts to combine related trends.
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