Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrates the data about five different activities, regarding people participation over two decades at a social center in Melbourne, city of Australia. The activities are: film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances.

Overall, an enormous number of folks contributed to the film club contrary to the musical performances, which were lowest among all.

To begin with, no one played part in musical performances until 2005 and the numbers increased gradually over the time and became around 11 in 2010. Additionally, it grew slightly over the years and number of people who took part were approximately 16 in the year of 2020. Moreover, table tennis took a good start and almost 16 people contributed in the beginning and it increased slowly until 2010 and a dramatic rise is seen in participants after that and were 55 in the end. Furthermore, around 26 people participated in amateur dramatics at the start and this declined significantly from 2005 to 2020 and about 6 persons were left in 2020.

Besides, martial arts were popular among society, started from 36 people in 2000 and fluctuated throughout the period and members count was almost same in 2020. Lastly, film club activity was top in terms of popularity starting from 65 people from the start and then ending with 66 folks in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover all five activities and give a clear overview by identifying the film club as the most popular and musical performances as initially the least attended. Most reported figures and trends are grounded in the graph: table tennis rises sharply after 2010 to about 54, amateur dramatics falls to around 6, and martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s. However, the overview is not fully accurate for the whole period: musical performances are not the lowest by 2020, when amateur dramatics has fallen to about 6 while musical performances reach roughly 18. There is also a small timeline error in saying musical performances began increasing after 2005; they remain at zero until 2005 and rise by 2010. A more precise overview of the changing rankings would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a body that reports the activities in a generally understandable sequence. Linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Additionally,” and “Furthermore” help signal progression, and the reader can follow the main trends. However, the body moves between series using a long chain of connectors, so the organisation can feel mechanical rather than grouping related trends. Some references are also unclear, as in “it grew slightly” and “were 55 in the end,” where the subject or number being described is not consistently explicit. Grouping the declining and rising activities into clearer comparisons, and using fewer formulaic transitions, would make the progression more fluent and cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary to describe the graph, including “fluctuated,” “declined significantly,” and “dramatic rise.” These choices communicate the main patterns, and the activity names are reported accurately. However, several expressions are informal or imprecise for an academic summary: “folks,” “took a good start,” “contributed,” and “members count” do not fit naturally with describing participation figures. “Enormous number” also overstates the difference without adding precision. Prefer neutral, conventional collocations such as “participants,” “started at,” and “the number of members.” There is some variety in trend language, but more consistent and precise wording would improve the academic tone and reduce awkward phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the overall meaning is generally clear. Some sentences are controlled, such as “Furthermore, around 26 people participated in amateur dramatics at the start,” but there are several grammatical errors in longer constructions. For example, “the numbers increased gradually over the time and became around 11” has an unclear subject and awkward verb pattern, while “a dramatic rise is seen in participants after that and were 55” shifts structure and lacks agreement. The phrase “starting from 65 people from the start” also repeats the same idea and has an awkward construction. Work on maintaining a clear subject and consistent tense within each sentence, and check agreement and article use when describing figures.

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