Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph highlights the information on the numbers of candidates for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, in Melbourne there were five different activities on which participants participate. Table tennis would be played more about 15 to 55 participant participate between 2000 to 2020. While material art would not be played at high level. And the amateur dramatics, there are less number of participants, first 25 paticipant participate in this activity then the number of candidates would be decreased.

To begin with, film club the number of candidates were 65 percent thhe in 2020 it would be 70 so there would less increase in number of candidates. Then same with the material arts , the number of players would not reach to the highest about 37 to 40 players would be increased.

Furthermore, armature dramatics, the number of participants first increased then after years the number of candidates had decreaced in 2020. After this the table tennis, at first, the number of candidates would be increased about 15 to 55 percent number of players. And finally the musical performances, this activity had started in 2005 and then in 2020 the number of participates would be raised.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the five activities and mention several important patterns, especially table tennis’s strong rise and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main contrasts: film club remained broadly stable at around the mid-60s, while martial arts fluctuated around the mid-30s. Some figures are misreported: film club is described as reaching 70, although it ends at about 66, and table tennis is given as rising from 15 to 55 rather than approximately 16 to 54. Musical performances began in 2010, not 2005. The response therefore reports relevant features but only partially and with inaccuracies. Focus on the overall trends and support them with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and signposts such as “To begin with” and “Furthermore” show an attempt to organise information. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview repeats details that are later revisited, and the final paragraph moves through activities without a clear grouping or comparison. Some linking is awkward or incomplete, as in “While material art would not be played at high level,” which does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence. Repeated openings such as “the number of candidates” also make the report feel repetitive. Group the series by trend—for example, stable/fluctuating figures versus rising/falling figures—and use concise links to show those relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “participants,” “increased,” “decreased” and “started,” so the reader can generally identify the activities and trends being discussed. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. “Candidates” and “players” are used where “participants” is more appropriate, while “material art” does not correctly name “martial arts.” Expressions such as “would be played more” and “15 to 55 percent number of players” are unclear, and “percent” is not suitable for these participant counts. There are also spelling errors, including “paticipant,” “armature” and “decreaced.” Use precise trend language such as “rose from,” “remained stable” and “fell to,” and check activity names and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the reader can usually follow the broad meaning. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in verb forms, agreement and sentence construction. For example, “the number of candidates were” has a singular subject with a plural verb, while “participants participate” repeats the verb awkwardly. The repeated use of “would” for past chart data is also inappropriate; use the past simple, such as “rose” or “declined.” Some sentences are fragments or poorly joined, including “While material art would not be played at high level” and “And the amateur dramatics, there are less number of participants.” Practise writing complete, direct sentences with accurate past-tense verbs and clear subject–verb agreement.

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