Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrate the explanation of various activities at one social center in malbourne, Australia, during the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall the flim club remain popular throughout the period whereas, table tennis participants increase dramatically, while amateur dramatics fall steadily and musical performance started to improved in 2010 and afterwards.
Now, In 2000 the most popular activity was film club attracted about 70 participants, In 2010 there was a slight dip in participants(65) nevertheless, in 2015 its start to attract more participants (75) and remain popular.
The second most popular was martial arts,In 2000 the participants was about (39) but there was a slightly decline of participants in 2005 (30) and 2015 (35) sudenly a slightly improved in 2020 (33).
Amateur dramatics decline dramatically, after 2005. In 2020 there was only 5 participants. moreover,, Table tenis substantially improved after 2010 it has only 20 participants nevertheless in 2020 it attracted 55 participants which became second most popular activity after flim club.
Lastly musical performace after 2010 started to attract more participants and in 2000 the total participants were 15.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the main overall patterns: film club remains the most popular, table tennis rises sharply, and amateur dramatics declines. You also note that musical performances begin to attract participants later in the period. However, several figures are inaccurate and weaken the report’s coverage: film club is about 64 in 2000, not 70, and reaches about 66 in 2020 rather than 75; martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s, not the values given; and musical performances start at zero, not 15 in 2000. The overview is relevant, but the account of some series is incomplete or unclear. Check the graph carefully and compare the key starting and ending figures to make the main trends more precise.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to descriptions of individual activities. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Lastly” help signal stages. However, the body paragraphs do not consistently group related trends, and some transitions are awkward or mechanical. For example, “nevertheless” is used where a straightforward contrast or sequence would be clearer, and the long section beginning “Amateur dramatics decline dramatically” shifts abruptly to table tennis. Punctuation around these transitions also makes the progression harder to follow. Grouping the rising, falling and relatively stable activities more deliberately would make the comparisons clearer.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “increase dramatically,” “decline,” “slight dip” and “substantially improved.” These choices show an attempt to vary the language rather than simply repeat “go up” or “go down.” However, the range and control are limited by repeated or imprecise expressions, such as “participants” and “popular,” and by collocation and word-form errors: “the explanation of various activities” does not accurately describe what the graph presents, while “started to improved” is not a natural form. There are also spelling errors in key labels, including “flim,” “malbourne” and “Table tenis.” Use accurate activity names and a wider set of precise trend verbs and comparison phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including contrasts between activities, but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “The graph illustrate,” “the film club remain,” and “started to improved.” Several sentences also have faulty or unclear construction, such as “the most popular activity was film club attracted about 70 participants,” which needs a relative clause or a clearer sentence break. Commas and capitalisation are often inaccurate, particularly in “In 2000 …, In 2010 …” and around “martial arts,In 2000.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build comparisons using shorter, correctly punctuated clauses before adding more complex structures.
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