Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrate the information of people who interestedin five different activities at one social centre in melbourn , Australia from 2000 to 2020

Overall , it is evident that the maximum number of participants taken part in film club . But minimum was musical performance

Heading to details, in year 2000 film club was highest withalmost 65 participants and musical performance was almost 0 number of participantsbut it remain constant till 2005. The film club was declined till 2010 at almost 60

participants but musical performance rose till thousand 20 at almost 18 people. The table tennis and.amateur dramtical was surge from 2000 to 2005 and from 2005 to 2010 table tennis remain same but amateur dramtical drop drown with almost 20 participants . both this activites of this equilibrium at this point .

Proving further, the martial art was fluctuate The film club increased from 2010 to 2015 with almost at 65 people but martial art declined at almost 30 perso. however, from 2015 to 2000 both film club and martial art go up .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the main series and make a useful attempt to describe changes, including the film club’s high starting point and amateur dramatics’ decline. However, the overview is incomplete and partly inaccurate: musical performances began at zero and rose to about 18, so they were not the lowest throughout, and table tennis ended as the second-largest activity at about 54. Several details are also misreported or unclear: musical performances reached about 12 in 2010, not 20, and the final sentence says “from 2015 to 2000,” reversing the period. The response therefore covers only some key features, with limited and under-developed comparisons. Give a clear overview of the contrasting trends and report the main end-point changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. Phrases such as “Overall,” “Heading to details,” and “Proving further” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression is not consistently clear because several activities and time periods are combined in long, confusing sentences. For example, the sentence beginning “The table tennis and.amateur dramtical…” shifts between two series and multiple years without clearly separating their trends. “Both this activities of this equilibrium at this point” is difficult to interpret, and the final comparison is unclear. Use one paragraph for the overview and organise details by clear trends or time periods, with accurate linking and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “declined,” “rose,” and “fluctuate,” and you attempt to describe change rather than simply list figures. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow. Expressions such as “maximum number … taken part,” “rose till thousand 20,” and “equilibrium at this point” are not suitable or clear in context. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “melbourn,” “dramtical,” and “activites.” Aim for precise, standard phrases for describing data, such as “the number of participants,” “increased to,” and “remained stable,” and check spelling of activity names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use both simple statements and longer sentences with contrast, but control is limited and errors are frequent enough to make some relationships difficult to understand. The opening has subject–verb and article problems: “The line graph illustrate” should be “The line graph illustrates,” and “people who interested” needs a verb form such as “people who were interested.” Other examples include “it remain constant,” “the martial art was fluctuate,” and “both film club and martial art go up,” where tense and verb forms are inaccurate. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly in the long detail sentences. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build shorter, complete sentences before adding more complex comparisons.

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