Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pictorial evidence beneath provides numerical data of members of a social centre in Melbourne, Australia in the two decades.

Overall, the number of people participating in table tennis has increased drastically. While the participants of film club and martial arts have remained relatively constant throughout the time peiod. The number of people participating in amateur dramtics has declined gradually.

Looking first at the table tennis, the number increased to around 20 till 2005 and remained constant until next 5 years. After 2005 the number grew drastically till the end of the graph (reached approximately 55 till 2020). There was a gradual increase in the people taking part in musical performances after 2005, until the end of the graph number reached nearly 20.

The participants of film club and table tennis were relatively constant, though the highest number of particpants were in in film club (nearly 70 till 2020). The number of people taking part in amateur dramatics increased till 2005. This number gradually decreased to under-10 until the year 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important patterns, including the sharp rise in table tennis, the steady growth in musical performances, and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is incomplete and contains a key inconsistency: it says film club and martial arts remained relatively constant, but later claims table tennis was relatively constant, despite its strong rise after 2010. The film-club figure is also overstated as “nearly 70” in 2020, when it is about 66. Some trends are described accurately, but the account gives limited coverage of martial arts and does not clearly compare the activities across the period. A more precise overview and consistent selection of the main comparisons would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and it generally moves from one activity to another in a sensible way. However, progression is weakened by repetition and unclear comparisons. Table tennis is discussed as both sharply increasing and “relatively constant,” while the final paragraph returns to amateur dramatics after it has already been covered. Linking phrases such as “Looking first” and “After 2005” help guide the reader, but some connections are imprecise, and “till” is repeated. Grouping the rising activities together and then contrasting them with the declining or stable series would create a clearer progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “increased drastically,” “remained relatively constant,” “gradual increase” and “declined.” These choices communicate the main trends, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some expressions are imprecise or awkward for describing a graph: “pictorial evidence beneath,” “increased to around 20 till 2005,” and “reached approximately 55 till 2020.” There are also spelling errors, including “peiod,” “dramtics” and “particpants,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for concise, conventional chart language and check spelling carefully; for example, describe a figure as rising “to” a value or “by” an amount, rather than using “till” for both.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt some complex forms, such as the contrast beginning “While the participants of film club and martial arts…” and the clause “though the highest number…,” alongside simpler statements. However, the range is limited and several sentences are incomplete or awkwardly formed. The overview sentence beginning “While” is a fragment because it has no main clause, and “After 2005 the number grew drastically till the end of the graph (reached approximately 55…)” has an unclear relationship between its clauses. The phrase “the highest number of participants were” also has a subject–verb agreement problem. Use complete sentences, check singular and plural agreement, and vary sentence patterns while keeping each comparison grammatically clear.

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