Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The Line graph provides information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the time between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, five categories people had intrested in respectively. First of all Amateurs dramatic and Table tennis were at same position initially in the growing position at first decade However, a rapid increase in table tennis during the next decade contrally Amateurs dramatic faces huge decline at near to zero interested people.

Music performances was not preferable in 2000. Additionally, In 2005 people start taking part in performances However given data shows constant increase had been after 2010 till 2020.

As you Seen People Interested in More rather than others in film club the maximum number were seen in all two decades above to 60 . Although it is higher than amongst all. However, Martial arts seen at the middle section of the chart with continuity constant between 30 and 40.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important patterns: film club remains the most popular activity, table tennis rises sharply, amateur dramatics declines, and musical performances increase after starting at zero. These observations are broadly consistent with the chart. However, some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate: amateur dramatics and table tennis did not begin at the same level (about 26 and 16 participants), and musical performances did not begin in 2005; participation was still zero then and began in 2010. The overview also says little about the relatively stable martial-arts figures. The response contains 139 words, so it is 11 words below the required minimum; 18 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. Add a clearer overview and a few accurate figures to develop the main features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an opening, an overview and separate comments on several activities. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “Additionally” and “Although” attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview moves from amateur dramatics and table tennis to musical performances, then film club and martial arts without a clear grouping or sequence. Some linking words are inaccurate or awkward, particularly “However” and “Although” where the relationship between ideas is not clear. Organise the body paragraphs by contrasting trends—for example, rising activities together and declining or stable ones together—and use simpler, precise transitions to make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “participants,” “rapid increase,” “decline,” and “constant increase,” so the reader can identify the activities and general trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow. “Five categories people had interested in” is not a natural way to describe participation, while “same position” and “middle section of the chart” are imprecise. There are also spelling and word-form errors, such as “intrested,” “Amateurs dramatic,” and “contrally.” Aim for accurate trend language and natural collocations, such as “participation in amateur dramatics fell” or “martial-arts numbers fluctuated between 30 and 40.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use time references, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. For example, “Amateurs dramatic and Table tennis were at same position initially in the growing position” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “However given data shows constant increase had been after 2010” has problems with articles, tense and clause construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, with several sentence boundaries missing or unclear. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “while” and “whereas.” Check articles, verb forms and punctuation, and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and main verb.

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