Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given line graph provides an insight on the number of individuals taking part in different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the time period [redacted phone].

Five categories of activities are dicussed alongwith the number of participants and their information was compared based on 5 gap years ranging from [redacted phone]. It was evident that a larger proportion of participants took part in film club whereas, musical performances were least category to be opted by partcipants in 2005. However, individuals selecting table tennis showed an abrupt decline in 2020.

Film club was dominant activity to be performed by 65 indidviduals that remained static from [redacted phone], although a slight decrease was reported in 2010. Materail arts showed a different pattern and the data suggested that it continued to rise and fall during all those 5 years. Table tennis is another activity that showed a positive response and participants showed keen interest in this activity in 2020 although only 20 number of participants were observed in 2000 as comapred to 55 in 2020.While looking at the statistics for Amateur dramatics and Musical performances, it was clearly seen that both categories showed an inverse relation. 25 individual retained their interest in the former activity in 2000 which sustatantially fall to number 5 in 2020. The later activity was not in initiated until 2005, sh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main categories and make some relevant comparisons, including film club’s high participation and table tennis’s rise from about 16 to 54. However, the overview is unclear and includes a major contradiction: table tennis is said to show an “abrupt decline in 2020,” although it rises sharply to its highest point. Film club did not remain static throughout; it dipped slightly before increasing. The claim that musical performances were the least chosen in 2005 is also misleading, since participation was zero in both 2000 and 2005, and the final sentence is incomplete, leaving that series unreported. To strengthen the response, give a clear overview of the contrasting trends and accurately summarise all five activities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to details, and phrases such as “While looking at the statistics” signal a shift between topics. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview mixes trends with inaccurate claims, and the final paragraph combines several series without a clear order. Some linking is mechanical or confusing: “However” introduces a statement that does not logically contrast with the preceding point, while “both categories showed an inverse relation” does not clearly explain the comparison. The response also ends abruptly mid-sentence. Organise the details into clearer groups, use links that express the actual relationship between ideas, and provide a complete concluding description of the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “participants,” “dominant activity,” “decline,” and “positive response,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “gap years” for the five-year intervals, “least category to be opted,” and “showed an inverse relation” when describing two trends. Spelling errors—including “dicussed,” “partcipants,” and “comapred”—are noticeable, and some phrases are unnecessarily elaborate. Aim for precise, conventional language for describing graphs, such as “rose steadily,” “fell sharply,” and “remained relatively stable.” Check spelling and choose words that describe the data directly rather than relying on vague expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentences, for example the sentence beginning “Film club was dominant activity,” and use subordinate clauses to compare trends. However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships unclear. Examples include missing articles in “was dominant activity” and “only 20 number of participants,” awkward tense and agreement in “25 individual retained their interest … which … fall,” and the incomplete final clause, “The later activity was not in initiated until 2005, sh”. Punctuation is also unreliable, with a missing space after “2020.” Use simpler, complete sentence patterns when needed, check articles and singular/plural forms, and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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