Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the information about the number of participants in different activities at one social centre in melbourne,Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall,the number of participants at different social centre where table tennis is most popular furthermore Amateur dramatics is lowest at end.

In year,2000 flim club lead between 60 to 70 number where it fall down in 2010 in 60 number then it again surge in 2020 roughly 70 number of participants.furthermore,martial arts in 2000 begain approximately 37 number of participants as well as in 2010 increase in 40 number and in year 2015 and 2020 are nearly 39 and 40 respectively.

In additionaly,in year 2000 near about 27 number where in 2005 increase 30 number of participants then it fallen down slightly in 2020 between 5 and 10 number ingeged,then table tennis start by nearly 26 number in 2000 then it was climb in 2010 in 20 number then it continueosly rise and reach in top in 2020 at the number of roughly 60 number then musical performances it begin in 2005 by 0 number then ity rose in year 2010 in nearly 12 number then at the end in yaer 2020 it again grow in 20 number of participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant patterns, including the film club’s high participation, the decline in amateur dramatics, and the growth of table tennis. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: table tennis was not the most popular activity overall, as the film club remained higher throughout, although table tennis rose sharply and ranked second by 2020. Some figures and trends are also misreported. For example, table tennis began at about 16, not 26, and rose to about 54; martial arts fluctuated around the mid-30s rather than reaching roughly 40 at the end. Musical performances began in 2000, not 2005. Select the main trends accurately and support them with a few reliable comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to descriptions of the activities, so the reader can recognise an attempt to organise the information. However, progression within the body is difficult to follow because several series are combined in long, loosely connected sentences. Connectors such as “furthermore,” “then,” and “in additionaly” are repetitive or used inaccurately, and the references in “where it fall down” and “then it was climb” are not always clear. Grouping the activities into clearer comparisons—for example, the consistently high film-club figures and the contrasting rise in table tennis—would create a more logical sequence. Use shorter sentences and link each comparison explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of trend vocabulary, including “surge,” “rise,” “fallen down,” and “reach in top,” and the reader can generally identify the activities and intended changes. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “lead between 60 to 70 number,” “begin by 0 number,” and “it was climb” do not express the data naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “flim,” “begain,” and “continueosly.” Build a reliable set of chart expressions and check spelling; use precise phrases such as “stood at,” “increased to,” and “reached a peak of.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the descriptions hard to read. Verb forms are often faulty, as in “where it fall down,” “it was climb,” and “it again grow”; use past-tense forms such as “fell,” “climbed,” and “grew.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: the body contains long run-on sentences, with missing spaces after full stops and commas. Articles, prepositions, and number expressions are often incomplete, as in “in 60 number” and “reach in top.” Practise writing one clear sentence per trend, with a subject, correctly formed past-tense verb, and a precise figure.

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