Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates the numbers of paticipants from veriety of activities at singal social centre in Melbourne and Australia during 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the number of participants in Film club was among the highest. where as Musical performances remain lowest. Rapid increase was seen was seen in Table tennis. While other games like Martial arts and Amateur dramatics remain stable but with slighly up and down throughout the years.

On the onehand, Film club participants remain unchanged throughout the years, starting from 64 participants in 2000 and end with the same proportion in 2020. Likewise, Martial arts also remain stable but lesser in players than Film club as it intially it was as 35 and with little variation it again end up on 35 in 2020.

On the otherhand, games which was at its lowest was Musical performances which have increased from 0 in 2005 and goes maximum upto 18 in number. Where as Table tennis show sudden increase in the middle years and it starts from only 17 in nmuber and after sudden increase in 2010, and end up to 55 in number at the end of 2020. Opposite goes with Amatrut

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant features, including the film club’s high participation, the rise in table tennis, and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is not consistently accurate: film club did not remain unchanged, as it dipped from about 64 to 60 before rising to 66, and musical performances were not the lowest throughout the period because they rose while amateur dramatics fell to around 6 by 2020. Some figures are also misreported, such as saying film club ended at 64 and table tennis rose suddenly in 2010; its major increase occurred after 2010. The final comparison is unfinished (“Opposite goes with Amatrut”), leaving a key trend unexplained. Select the main changes accurately and complete the account of all series.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group activities into contrasting patterns. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is weakened by unclear or inaccurate links, including “On the onehand” and “On the otherhand,” and by repeated use of “Where as” and “Likewise.” The final sentence breaks off at “Opposite goes with Amatrut,” so the discussion does not reach a complete conclusion. Some references are also difficult to follow, such as “games which was at its lowest.” Use clear paragraph links, refer to each activity by name, and ensure each paragraph develops a complete comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “participants,” “increased,” “stable,” and “variation,” so the reader can identify the general subject and trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “same proportion” is unsuitable for participant numbers, “maximum upto 18 in number” is awkward, and “players” does not fit all the activities. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “paticipants,” “veriety,” “slighly,” and “Amatrut.” Aim for precise chart language such as “the figure,” “rose to,” and “declined to,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the response generally communicates that several activities changed over time. However, grammatical errors are frequent, and some sentence structures are difficult to understand. Examples include “Film club participants remain unchanged,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “it intially it was as 35,” which has faulty word order and an incomplete construction. The overview also contains a sentence fragment beginning “where as,” while “games which was at its lowest” has an agreement error. Tense use is inconsistent when describing past data, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise complete past-tense sentences, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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