Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph compare the number of people participating in the various activities at single social center in Melbourne, Australia over a 20 year period from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the number of participating in Film club, Table tennis and Musical performances rose considerably over the period, where as the figure for Martial arts and Amateur dramatices followed the opposite trend. Film Club was the highest throughout, while amateur dramatices experinenced the most sharpest decline.

In 2005, Film club stood around 65 number of participants far higher than the Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances, which stood at around 37, 27 respectively, Over the following 10 years, the figure for Film Club declined slowly but after that the number of participants increased over time in the end reached to 67 people. Table Tennis also followed the same pattern but the starting was different and gain the sharpest climed and almost reach to Film club.

Amateur dramatices, by contrast, saw only dropped dramatically from 27 number of participants to 7 participants. Although the Musical performances started in 2005 but climbed up fastly to 20 number of participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall contrast: film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises strongly, and amateur dramatics declines. However, several details are inaccurate or unclear. The graph shows film-club participation falling from about 64 in 2000 to 60 in 2010, then rising to 66 in 2020; your account begins with 2005 and gives figures that do not consistently match the plotted years. Table tennis rises from 16 to 54, rather than merely “almost reach[ing]” film club, and musical performances begin in 2010, not 2005. The overview also incorrectly says martial arts followed a downward trend overall; it fluctuates around the mid-30s and ends near its starting level. Select key figures accurately and distinguish overall trends from fluctuations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. This gives the reader a coherent overall arrangement, and contrasts such as “by contrast” help signal a change of focus. However, the progression within the detail paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. The first paragraph combines several activities and years without clearly separating their trends, while the final paragraph gives little detail about musical performances. Some linking is also awkward or unclear, as in “Although the Musical performances started in 2005 but climbed up fastly.” Organise the body by related trends, and use clear time references and comparisons so each sentence develops one point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “declined,” “increased,” and “sharpest,” and the meaning is generally recoverable. However, the range and control are limited by repeated or imprecise expressions such as “number of participants,” “stood,” and “climbed.” Several word forms, spellings, and collocations are inaccurate: “dramatices,” “experinenced,” “sharpest climed,” “fastly,” and “gain the sharpest.” These errors make parts of the description less natural and occasionally obscure the intended trend. Aim for precise graph language, such as “the figure rose,” “participation fluctuated,” or “recorded the steepest increase,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including an overview with “while” and a contrast introduced by “by contrast.” However, grammatical errors are frequent, and some sentence structures are difficult to interpret. For example, “The line graph compare” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the number of participating” uses an incorrect noun form. The sentence beginning “In 2005” contains a faulty comparison and runs several clauses together; “Although … but” also uses incompatible linking structures. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries need attention. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas with one accurate connector. Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb and that the tense remains consistent when describing the graph.

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