Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Lets start us, first of all we have film clud in 2002 it was on above 60 and it increse and come to around 68. The second was Martial arts in 2000 it was on 35 number than it grew in 2005 and in 2010 it again down and in 2015 it again up and last in 2020 he again come same position like 2000.The third one is Amateur dramatics in 2000 it was on 26 than it descrese and in 2020 it was came to around 5. The forth one is table tennis in 2000 it was on it was on 15 number than it grew and in 2020 it cross 50. The last one is musical performances its start in 2005 from 0 number and in 2000 it came to around 15.

The most growing thing was table tennis .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify all five activities and report several broad trends, including the sharp rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, key details are inaccurate or unclear: film-club participation rises to about 66, not 68, and musical performances began in 2000, not 2005; they reached about 18 by 2020, rather than around 15 in 2000. The account also lacks a clear overview of the main comparisons, such as the film club remaining the most popular and table tennis becoming the second-largest activity. The response is 142 words, below the 150-word minimum, and the copied prompt wording is excluded from that count. Add a concise overview and report the years and figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence through the activities, and phrases such as “The third one” and “The last one” help signal which series is being discussed. However, this list-like approach does not create a clear overall progression from an overview to grouped details. The opening repeats the task wording, while the final sentence, “The most growing thing was table tennis,” adds a brief conclusion without summarising the other major patterns. Several sentences run together through repeated “and” links, making relationships between changes difficult to follow. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs, grouping trends where possible and using clear time references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “grew,” “decrease” (attempted as “descrese”), and “cross 50,” so the reader can generally identify the trends you mean. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “it was on 35 number,” “come to around,” and “the most growing thing.” Spelling errors such as “clud,” “increse,” and “descrese” also weaken precision. Use standard trend language and vary it appropriately: for example, “stood at,” “rose to,” “fell to,” and “remained stable.” Check spelling and choose collocations that describe participant numbers naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to describe changes over time using past-tense verbs and some linked clauses, but sentence structures are mostly simple and frequently inaccurate. For example, “in 2000 it was on 35 number than it grew in 2005” has an unclear comparison and faulty clause connection, while “in 2020 it was came to around 5” combines incompatible verb forms. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, and the repeated “it” makes some references unclear. These errors do not prevent the reader from recognising the general topic, but they limit accuracy and control. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense forms such as “stood,” “rose,” and “fell.”

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