Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line garph illusrates the number of participants for various acitivities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020. Overall, there are five activites, in which Flim club shows a higher steady number, while other sports like martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances have vary in number of players with a increase and decrease number.

In 2000, the number of participants in film club were at 65 and had highest record compare to other activites. Whereas in martials arts and amateur dramatics, individuals attended by 45 and 35, respectively. Meanwhile, musical performance started with lowest participants in 2005 from strach.

In 2010, the participants attended musical performances jumped up to 10 and gradually increased to 15 in 2020. Whereas the players attended drama at amateur shows a decreased in number around 20 and signifincantly dropped in 2020 at 9. However, martials arts had flucation number throughout the year and table tennis showed a dramatic rise in number with 18 and gradually jumped from lowest to highest of 51, just below the flim club.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main categories and some important patterns, especially the film club’s consistently high participation, the rise in table tennis, and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is unclear: saying the other activities “have vary” does not summarise their distinct trends, and the response omits the film club’s slight recovery and the broadly fluctuating martial-arts figures. Several values are inaccurate: martial arts and amateur dramatics began at about 36 and 26, not 45 and 35; musical performances began in 2000, not 2005; and table tennis rose to about 54, rather than 51. To strengthen the report, give a clear overview and select accurate start and end figures to support the key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about different years, and time markers such as “In 2000” and “In 2010” help orient the reader. However, progression is uneven because the second and third paragraphs mix several activities without a consistent comparison or clear grouping. Some linking words are used mechanically or create confusing relationships: “Whereas” begins fragments, while “However” introduces the table-tennis trend without a clear contrast. The overview also combines several ideas in one sentence, making the main message difficult to follow. Organise the details into clearer groups—for example, stable/fluctuating activities and rising/falling activities—and use complete sentences with links that show the intended relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “fluctuation,” “dramatic rise,” and “gradually increased,” so the reader can recognise the subject and broad trends. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, word-form, and spelling problems make the report less precise. Examples include “higher steady number,” “increase and decrease number,” “highest record,” and “jumped up,” while misspellings such as “garph,” “activites,” and “flim” are noticeable. Some expressions are also unclear, such as “started with lowest participants … from strach.” Build a more accurate set of trend phrases and check spelling; prefer concise descriptions such as “remained relatively stable,” “peaked at,” and “fell to.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “whereas,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, control is inconsistent, and several sentence patterns are faulty. For example, “the number … were” has subject–verb disagreement, “have vary” uses an incorrect verb form, and “individuals attended by 45” is missing a grammatical construction. “Whereas in martial arts and amateur dramatics…” is a fragment, and “a decreased in number” does not form a correct clause. Articles, plurals, and tense choices also need attention. Practise writing complete comparison sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, such as “Participation in martial arts fluctuated around the mid-30s.”

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