Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line illustrates the number of partocipate in five different activities in social centre Film club, Martialarts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, Musical performance.

Overall, some actvities witnessed a signifiacnt growth. While others experienced a decline. The film club is the highest and musical performance represented lowest.

The film club was the most popular activity throughout the period. In 2000, it boosted approximetaly 64 participant. Although the number dipped around 60 in 2010 and it gradually rose to nearly 65 participant in 2020.

In 2000, the number of participant in martial arts is around 38, though it faced fluctuation over the period nearly 40 participant in 2010 and dropped to 39 in 2020. In contrast, ameteur dramatics begin with 28 patricipant in 2000, even though it faced a considerable declined 19 in 2010 and 9 participant in 2020.

The table tennis paticipants were the second highest approximelaly 19 in 2000 and rose to 38 participant in 2015. It reached its peak position around 51 in 2020. Whereas the number of particpant in musical performance was the lowest 0 in 2005 and 19 participant in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall pattern: film club remains the most popular activity, table tennis rises markedly, and amateur dramatics declines. The response also covers all five activities and includes relevant comparisons, which makes the summary informative. However, some figures and descriptions are inaccurate: martial arts starts at about 36, not 38, and ends at about 36, rather than 39; amateur dramatics begins near 26, not 28; and table tennis reaches about 54 in 2020, rather than 51. The overview also calls musical performances the lowest without clarifying that this is true only at the beginning; by 2020 amateur dramatics is lowest. More precise reporting of these changes would make the key features clearer and better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs describing the activities. Grouping film club and martial arts before discussing the declining and rising series helps the reader follow the data. Some links between ideas are less effective, however. For example, “Although the number dipped around 60 in 2010 and it gradually rose” is not a complete contrast structure, and “Whereas” begins a fragment at the end. The overview’s “While others experienced a decline” is also detached from the preceding sentence. Use complete sentences and connect comparisons more directly; this would make the progression smoother and reduce the occasional mechanical or unclear cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “fluctuation,” “considerable decline,” “dipped,” and “rose,” and these choices help communicate changes over time. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “partocipate,” “actvities,” “signifiacnt,” and “approximetaly.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “boosted” does not describe a participant total, and “peak position” is less suitable than a direct description of the highest figure. The repeated use of “participant” and “number of participant” also limits range and accuracy. Aim for precise collocations such as “stood at,” “the figure for,” and “increased to,” while checking spelling and plural forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is some variety in sentence forms, including contrast clauses with “Although” and “though,” and most of the intended comparisons can be understood. However, several sentences contain grammatical problems that make the relationships less clear. “Although the number dipped around 60 in 2010 and it gradually rose” combines an although-clause with an independent clause incorrectly; “While others experienced a decline” is also incomplete. There are recurring issues with articles, plurals, and agreement, as in “64 participant” and “the number … is around 38” when describing past data. Use past-tense forms consistently and check that each subordinate clause is attached to a complete main clause. More accurate sentence construction would strengthen the range already attempted.

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