Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph below shows the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne,Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

overall, the film club remaind the most popular activity throughout the period. Musical performance experienced asignificant increase, while amateur dramatics became less popular. Meanwhile participation in martial arts fluctuated and table tennid showed an upward trend.

In 2000, approximately 64 people participated in the film club, making it most popular activity. This figure slightly decrease around 58 in 2010 before rising to about 3 in 2020. The number of people taking martial arts was around 376 in 2000. it goes to somwhere 31 in 2005, then increased to around 39 in 2020.

Table tennis started with about 18 participants in2000 and rose gradually to around 20 in2010. After that it icreased sharply reaching at 58 participants in 2020. In constrast amateur dramatics participants declined from around 18 in2010 to 4participants in 2020.

finally musicalpermonance had almost no participants in 2005 but the figure increased to about 10 in 2010 and reached approximately 15 by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important overall patterns: the film club remains the leading activity, table tennis rises strongly, and amateur dramatics declines. However, some key figures are inaccurate or unclear. Most seriously, the film-club figure is said to rise to “about 3” in 2020, although it is approximately 66; martial arts begins at “around 376,” rather than about 36. The account also omits the film club’s actual slight dip and recovery, and gives only a limited comparison of the series. Your overview is relevant, but the inaccurate details and incomplete reporting mean the main features are only partly conveyed. Check each plotted value carefully and describe the major changes across the full period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the figures. The overview groups the main trends effectively, and transitions such as “After that” and “finally” help signal sequence. However, progression within the detail is uneven: the film-club and martial-arts figures are combined, then table tennis and amateur dramatics are paired, without a consistent comparison or clear rationale. Some links are also awkward, as in “it goes to somwhere 31,” and the final paragraph feels appended rather than integrated. Use paragraphs organised around clear comparisons, and connect each figure to its trend with precise references so the reader can follow the account more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some suitable task vocabulary, including “participants,” “fluctuated,” “upward trend,” “declined,” and “increased sharply.” These choices help communicate the broad patterns. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors are noticeable, including “remaind,” “table tennid,” “icreased,” “constrast,” and “musicalpermonance.” Phrases such as “it goes to somwhere 31” are also imprecise and do not describe a trend naturally. Aim for accurate, concise expressions such as “fell to approximately 32” or “rose to around 36.” Proofreading spelling and using standard collocations for describing figures would make the information easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overview uses a useful range of clauses to compare trends. However, errors occur frequently and sometimes make the data difficult to interpret. For example, “This figure slightly decrease” has an incorrect verb form, while “it goes to somwhere 31” shifts tense and lacks a clear grammatical structure. Capitalisation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “2000. it goes” and “finally musical…” Articles are sometimes missing, as in “making it most popular activity.” Use the past tense consistently for the historical period, check subject–verb agreement, and review articles and punctuation. Short, accurate sentences are preferable when reporting individual values.

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