Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrate the number of participants of different activities at ocial centre in Melbourne Australia between 2000 to 2020 in this time period .
Overall , it can be seen that flim club , Table tennis and musical performances number of particicants activity increase on this time period . While , Amateur drematics trand decrease on the same time period . It is also noticable that , participants activity Martial arts flucatud on this time period .
Looking at the data and more datails , in 2000 Film club start aproximately 65 people at the end of the perion 2020 it was around 67 people , It is highest poarticapite on this period . However,table tennis start in 2000 at around 17 people and it was grow rapidly end of the period it was approximately 53 people . On the other hand in 2005 Musical perfomance start and it increase end of the period it was around 15 pepole .
in terms of , Martial arts start activity in 2000 it was around 36 people this tends flucuted end of the period it was 36 around people .
On the other hand , Amateur dramatics people activity start in 2000 at 24 people and finish
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the main broad patterns: film-club participation remains highest, table tennis rises substantially, amateur dramatics declines, and martial arts fluctuates. Several figures are also close to the chart, such as film club at about 65–67 and table tennis ending near 53. However, the report is only partially complete: the final sentence about amateur dramatics stops at “finish,” so its steep decline to around 6 is not reported. The musical-performances account also says the activity “start[s] in 2005,” whereas the chart shows no participants until 2010. To make the key features clearer and more fully supported, complete the comparison of all five activities and accurately identify when musical performances begin.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic overall structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs containing details. The overview usefully groups the rising activities, the declining activity and the fluctuating series. However, progression becomes difficult to follow in the detail section: the account moves from film club to table tennis, musical performances, martial arts and then back to amateur dramatics, whose sentence is unfinished. Linking phrases such as “However” and “On the other hand” are repeated or do not always signal a clear contrast. Organise the details into clearer groups—for example, stable or fluctuating series versus strong rises and falls—and use transitions that accurately show how the figures relate.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “increase,” “decrease” and “fluctuated,” so the reader can identify the general trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the report harder to understand, such as “number of participants activity,” “it was grow rapidly,” and “highest poarticapite.” There are also frequent spelling errors, including “flim,” “drematics,” “noticable” and “perfomance.” These reduce precision in a task where accurate descriptions of trends are important. Build a reliable set of collocations such as “the number of participants,” “rose sharply,” and “remained the most popular,” and check spelling before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a contrast introduced by “While” and a comparison beginning “On the other hand.” However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently affect clarity. For example, “The line graph illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “between 2000 to 2020” uses an incorrect preposition pattern. The sentence beginning “Overall, it can be seen that…” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “in 2000 Film club start… at the end… it was…” shifts awkwardly between tenses. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and complete sentences, then check agreement, articles and prepositions in each sentence.
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