Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph highlights data about how many people participated in 5 various activities at one social club in Melbourne, Austrailia for the first two decade of xxi century.

overall, over the years more participants got involved in activities on table tennis and muscial plays., while amateur dramatics lost itd interest for public. Being flactuated, two types of activities, which are film club and m artial arts are levelled off. Another striking point is that over a twenty- year period between 2000 and 2020, the film club keep its position as the most popular activity.

looking at te details of table tennis, in 2000, there were 15 participants in club for it. in next 10 years, it attracted 5 more members, before dramatic surge from 20 to below 60 participants. in 2005, the activity on musical performance introduced and over the following 15 years, it saw a steady increase on the numbers of participants by about 20 in the last year.

regarding next two activities, film club and martial arts, they saw fluctuations, but without any changes in the overall position. Flim club started the process with about 60 members and finished it just below 70, while the participants of martial arts kept their numbers at around 35.

the number of participants of amteurs on draturgy was about 25 and it saw a steady decrease then by 10.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall patterns: table tennis and musical performances rise, amateur dramatics declines, and film club remains the most popular activity. Several comparisons are supported by the chart, including table tennis rising from about 15 to the mid-50s and martial arts staying around the mid-30s. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: musical performances began in 2010, not 2005, and increased from about 12 to 18; the final table-tennis figure is about 54, not below 60 as a precise endpoint description. The account of amateur dramatics is also incomplete: it rose slightly at first before falling sharply to about 6. A more precise overview and fuller reporting of these changes would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about table tennis and musical performances, then the other activities. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the information. Paragraphing also helps separate the main points. However, some links are awkward or unclear, such as “regarding next two activities,” and the final sentence about amateur dramatics feels added on rather than integrated into the comparison. The overview also combines several trends in a long sentence, making the relationships less clear. Use clearer transitions and group the series by contrasting trends—for example, rising activities together and stable or declining ones together—to strengthen progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “participants,” “fluctuations,” “steady increase,” and “dramatic surge,” which helps describe trends. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “most popular activity.” However, inaccurate word choice, spelling, and collocation are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less natural: “muscial plays” does not accurately name musical performances, “lost itd interest for public” is unclear, and “increase on the numbers” is not idiomatic. Several activity names are also misspelled or malformed. Aim for accurate chart terminology and standard collocations, such as “the number of participants increased” and “interest in amateur dramatics declined.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “while” and “before,” and the main trends are usually understandable. Some sentence structures are controlled, such as “Film club started the process with about 60 members and finished it just below 70.” However, there are some errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement, and verb forms. For example, “overall” and “looking” begin sentences without capital letters, while “the first two decade” needs plural agreement. The construction “in next 10 years” is missing an article, and “the film club keep its position” uses the wrong verb form. Review sentence punctuation and check articles, plurals, and tense consistency when describing the chart.

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