Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line chart illustrates information on the numbers of participants for various activities at one social cantre in Melbroune, Australia over the 20 year..s period.

Overall, it is clear that flim club accounted for the highest number of participants up to last year. While martial arts followed fluctuate trends and remaning other activities constantly increased.

In 2000, Flim club contributed around 65 participants, followed by martial arts by above 35 people. Whereas amateur dramatics accounted for almost 25 individuals, around 15 people participated in table tennis and no one did musical performances. In 2005, number of people decreased in flim club by several number. While participate of martial arts decreased by 5 people, again it rose in 2010. In addition, number of persons increased in amateur dramatics in 2010 by 4 people, where it decreased in 2010 and again it grew up tp aound 55 in 2020. Muscial performances has constanted i 2010.

In 2010, Flim club recorded below 60 number of people, when it was gradually increased to around 69 number of participant up to 2020. Martial arts had been following fluctuate treds up to last years by 30 to 40 numbers. However, after 2010 number participants has rose dramatically up to 2020.In addition, amateur dramatics dropped singnificantly to below 5 number. At last, muscial performances has increased gradually after 2010 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, such as film club at about 65 and musical performances starting at zero. However, the response only partially reports the main features, and some statements misrepresent the data. The overview says the “remaining other activities constantly increased,” although amateur dramatics fell substantially, while table tennis—not all other activities—rose sharply. The account also says film club reached around 69, whereas the chart shows about 66, and the description of amateur dramatics in 2010 is confused. To strengthen the report, give a clear overview of the contrasting trends, then select accurate comparisons: film club remained highest, table tennis climbed markedly, and amateur dramatics declined. Ensure each figure is linked to the correct year and activity.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, and it uses basic linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In addition,” and “However.” These features provide some organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the account moves between years and activities without a consistent structure. For example, the 2010 discussion appears in both body sections, and the sentence about amateur dramatics says it increased in 2010 before decreasing “in 2010” again. Some connectors also introduce unclear relationships, as in “Whereas” after a full sentence. Organise the details either by activity or by time period, avoid repeating years, and use linking words only when the relationship between the ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “participants,” “accounted for,” “decreased,” and “dramatically,” and you attempt to describe change rather than simply list figures. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the report difficult to understand, including “cantre,” “Melbroune,” “flim,” and “Muscial.” Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “followed fluctuate trends,” “number of people,” and “has constanted.” Choose precise trend language and check spelling carefully. For example, “fluctuated” is the correct verb for martial arts, while “remained stable” or “rose steadily” would describe a series more naturally. Accurate, varied vocabulary would make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “While” and “Whereas,” and the reader can understand some basic comparisons. However, complex constructions are often incomplete or faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences hard to interpret. Examples include “While martial arts followed fluctuate trends and remaning other activities constantly increased,” which lacks a clear main-clause structure, and “In 2010, Flim club recorded below 60 number of people.” Verb forms and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “performances has increased” and “number participants has rose.” Practise complete sentence patterns and consistent past-tense reporting: for example, “The number of participants in musical performances increased gradually after 2010.”

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