Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided line graph illustrates the information about the numbers of people taking part for various activities at one community centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is clear that all the categories saw the risen trend, while film club had the highest choosen activity by the citizens of Australia. Film club and muscial performances was the highest and lowest activity respectively.

To begin with, film club club explored by 65% of individuals maintained the same level throughout the period. Meanwhile, the martial arts figure started with the just under 40% in 2000 and had ossicilate till 2020. In 2005 it was nearly 30% of paticipants. It again rose to 40% in 2010, followed the same trend at the end of the period. However, amaterur dramatics accounted for around 28% in 2000 and with small rise it reached at 29% in 2005. It saw some graduall decline around 19% in 2020. After that it steadily increase at 52% in 2020.

Following that, in table tennis 18% of people take participate in 2000, followed the same figure and reached at 19% surpashed the figure of amateur dramatics. From 2010 it moderately decreased at 5% in 2020. Musical performances was not choosen by any people in 2005 and with small rise around 18% of individulas done it in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and includes an overview, but the overview is substantially inaccurate: it says all activities rose, whereas amateur dramatics fell markedly and martial arts fluctuated around a similar level. It also misidentifies musical performances as the lowest activity overall, although this is true only at the beginning; by 2020 amateur dramatics was lowest. Several key trends are confused or reversed. For example, table tennis rose sharply to about 54 participants, but the response says it decreased to 5%; amateur dramatics fell to about 6%, not 19%; and film-club participation stayed broadly stable near 60–66, rather than being described as unchanged. Select the main trends accurately and check each series against the graph before reporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, overview and two body paragraphs, and it attempts to group activities using phrases such as “To begin with” and “Following that.” However, the progression within the body paragraphs is difficult to follow because the descriptions jump between activities and some transitions do not clarify the relationship between points. “After that” introduces a table-tennis claim without a clear link to the preceding amateur-dramatics description, while “followed the same trend” is unclear about which trend is meant. The paragraphing provides some organisation, but the sequence would be clearer if each paragraph covered a coherent group of lines and used precise references to the activity being discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “line graph,” “participants,” “decline” and “maintained,” and it attempts to describe change with terms such as “rose” and “steadily.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the intended trend hard to understand. Examples include “the highest choosen activity,” “had ossicilate,” and “take participate”; spelling errors such as “muscial,” “paticipants” and “amaterur” also reduce clarity. Use standard chart language consistently, and distinguish between a rise, a fall and fluctuation. More accurate verbs and collocations would make the descriptions more precise and easier to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to use both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “while” and “Meanwhile.” However, grammatical errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. For example, “all the categories saw the risen trend” has an incorrect verb construction, and “Film club and muscial performances was” has a subject–verb agreement problem. In “it steadily increase at 52%,” the verb form is incorrect, while “in table tennis 18% of people take participate” has faulty sentence structure and tense. Articles, prepositions and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise forming clear past-tense comparisons, checking agreement, and proofreading each sentence for a complete and accurate structure.

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