Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The figure illustrates the number of participants performance at an event of different actvities in Melbourne, Austarlia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the participants were engaged in different activities like martial arts, film club, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performance.

Over the years from 2000 to 2020 the participants ineterst remain at the top among all the activities and there is slight variation in number but again the engagement sharply increases in the years from 2015 to 2020.

Martial arts is being the second whose engagement varies like a sine wave.

Amateur being at number third the rate of the participants sharply reduces in the year form 2005 and lowest in 2020.

There is fascinating fact of the participants interest in table tennis. The number shows a slight increament from the year 2000 to 2010, but in 2010 The number shoots up to an exponential high.

There is a lack in interest for the pupils to participate in musical performance from the year 2000 to 2005. No one has even participated in it, but form the year 2005 it also gets some popularity and the number increases very fast.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify all five activities and capture several important patterns: film club remains the most popular, amateur dramatics declines, and table tennis and musical performances rise. However, some descriptions are inaccurate or too vague to report the data reliably. For example, table tennis rises steadily from 16 to 20 by 2010, then climbs to 54 by 2020; it does not shoot up “in 2010.” Musical performances begin in 2010, rather than gaining popularity from 2005. The overview also says film-club participation “sharply increases” from 2015 to 2020, although the rise is modest. Include a few accurate figures and distinguish the main trends more precisely to make the summary fuller and clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an opening and then discusses the activities in separate sentences, so the reader can generally follow which series is being described. However, the overall progression is limited: the overview repeats that participants were engaged in the activities without summarising the strongest contrasts, and the body moves through the series without grouping related trends. Some linking expressions are awkward or unclear, such as “There is fascinating fact” and “but again,” while “Amateur being at number third” makes the relationship between the activity and its ranking difficult to follow. Organise the response into a concise overview followed by logically grouped comparisons, and use clear references and transitions rather than relying on repeated “the number” phrasing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “slight variation,” “engagement,” “increament,” and “exponential high,” but several choices are inaccurate, misspelled, or unnatural for describing a graph. Phrases such as “participants performance at an event” and “engagement varies like a sine wave” do not express the intended information clearly. “Exponential high” is also not an appropriate description of the sharp rise in table-tennis participation. Spelling errors such as “actvities,” “Austarlia,” and “ineterst” are noticeable and reduce precision. Use standard trend language consistently—for example, “the figure for,” “fluctuated,” “rose sharply,” and “fell steadily”—and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, but grammatical control is uneven, and errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “the participants ineterst remain at the top,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “Martial arts is being the second,” which has an incorrect verb construction. The sentence beginning “There is a lack in interest” also uses an awkward grammatical pattern, while “from the year 2005 it also gets some popularity” shifts tense and has unclear reference. Aim for accurate past-tense reporting throughout, with clear subjects and verbs, such as “Participation in martial arts fluctuated” and “No participants took part in musical performances until 2010.”

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