Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided graph illustrates the number of people participated in different activities at one social platform in Melbourne Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, mostly firm club has the most participants during this period, followed by amateur dramtics whose participants declined and reached to lowest at the end of this period.

In 2000 to 2010 the participants of firm club remain steady with slight drop of 5 percent and reached to 60 , while the martial arts participants surge from 36 to 38 and amateur dramatics player face a dramatic drop from 35 to 20. From 2010 to 2020 the firm club members grow slighly before reaching to 77, whereas partcipants of table tennis shows a dramatic surge from 20 to 55. Amatuer dramarics members face a major decline during this period from 20 to 5 and musical performance participants increased from 10 to 15. Martial arts memebers remain steady during this period beofre reaching to 35 same level from where it started in 2000

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important patterns: the film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises sharply, and amateur dramatics declines. However, some figures and comparisons are inaccurate. The film club ends at about 66, not 77, and amateur dramatics starts at about 26, not 35. The overview also says amateur dramatics was the second-largest activity, but martial arts was higher throughout. Some trends are reported too generally: martial arts fluctuates rather than remaining steady, and table tennis’s rise is especially marked after 2010. To strengthen the response, give a more accurate overview of the main contrasts and check key start and end values against the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and a chronological account, and the shift from 2000–2010 to 2010–2020 helps organise the details. The main ideas are generally easy to follow. However, the overview’s claim that amateur dramatics ranked second disrupts the comparison, and the final sentence about martial arts is difficult to process because several ideas are joined together. Linking phrases such as “whereas” and “before” are used, but some connections feel mechanical or unclear. Grouping the activities by their trends—for example, the rising series together and the declining series together—would create clearer progression and make comparisons more direct.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “dramatic drop,” “surge,” “decline” and “remain steady.” These choices show an attempt to vary your language rather than repeat “increase” and “decrease.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “social platform” for “social centre,” “firm club” for “film club,” and “participants … surge,” where the number of participants is what rises. Spelling errors, including “dramtics,” “partcipants” and “memebers,” are also noticeable and reduce precision. Aim for accurate chart vocabulary and proofread activity names; this will make your descriptions clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “whereas” and time clauses with “before.” However, errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas harder to understand. For example, “the number of people participated” needs a relative clause or a different construction, while “participants … remain steady” has a subject–verb agreement problem. Tense control is inconsistent in “remain steady,” “grow” and “face,” despite describing a completed period. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “in Melbourne Australia” and the long final sentence. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build complex sentences around clear subjects and verbs.

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