Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graphs compare the number of participants for five different activites at one social centre in melbourne austrlia for the period 2000 to 2020

overall, the most noticable feature is that film club experienced fluctuated throughout the period, eventually returning to its initial level, whereas amateur drarmatics showed a downward trend. Another noticeabe feature is

At the beginning of the period, flim club stood at 63 participants in the beginning then slightly fell to 59 by 2010.while, martial arts fluctuated between 35 and 39. meanwhile Amateur dramatics dramatically decreased from 25 to 5 participants by 2020.

turining to the line graph, the fighure for table tennis started at 15 participants and then gradually rose from 2010 to 2020 at 55 participants which it makes the second highest number of partcipants meanwhile musical performances rose from o to 15 participants

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant patterns, including the decline in amateur dramatics and the strong rise in table tennis, and you give some approximate figures that broadly match the chart. However, the response only partially covers the data: martial arts and musical performances receive little detail, and the overview is unfinished (“Another noticeabe feature is”). The claim that film club “eventually returning to its initial level” is inaccurate: it ends slightly above its starting figure, rather than returning to it. The response also falls 10 words short of the 150-word minimum. To develop the report, complete the overview and compare the main changes across all five activities, using accurate start and end figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the report, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview and then details about the activities. The final paragraph also signals a shift with “turning to the line graph.” However, progression is limited: the overview ends mid-thought, and the body does not clearly group or compare the five series. Connectors such as “meanwhile” are repeated and sometimes do not show a clear relationship between the figures. Paragraphing is present but the unfinished overview weakens the overall structure. A clearer plan—overview first, then one paragraph for the broadly stable or declining activities and another for the rising ones—would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-appropriate vocabulary, including “fluctuated,” “downward trend,” “decreased,” and “participants,” which helps communicate the main patterns. The range is nevertheless limited, and several spelling errors are noticeable, such as “activites,” “melbourne,” “austrlia,” “drarmatics,” and “partcipants.” Some expressions are awkward or imprecise, including “rose from 2010 to 2020 at 55 participants” and “which it makes the second highest number.” Repeated use of “meanwhile” also limits flexibility. Work on accurate spelling and natural collocations for describing data, such as “rose to” and “accounted for,” while varying verbs for increases, decreases, and stability.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer structures, including “whereas amateur dramatics showed a downward trend,” but sentence control is inconsistent. Several sentences are joined or punctuated incorrectly: “by 2010.while” lacks a space and creates a faulty boundary, while “At the beginning of the period … in the beginning” repeats the same idea within one sentence. The overview also ends with an incomplete construction, “Another noticeabe feature is.” There are errors in articles and sentence structure, as in “which it makes the second highest number,” and capitalisation and punctuation are often uncontrolled. Use complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check sentence boundaries, articles, and punctuation before submitting.

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