Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates information on the numbers of participants for verious types of activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, it is clearly seen that, the highest figure of film club and , noteable proportion of Amateur dramatics which was third highest figer in 2000 and reached least figer in 2020.

To beggin with, number of individuals in flim club was 65 in 2000 and it was same in 2020. While, martial arts figer was fluctuated start at 35 and fell down agian grew and reached 40 at last in 2020 it was stood at agian 35 members.

On the other hand, amateur dramatics was thirt highest figer compared to others it was 25 members in 2000, after that it was significantly decreased and stood 5 member in 2020 which was the lowest figer in 2020. Furthermore, table tennis and musical performances increased all time span table tennis start at 15 and reached about 55 members and musical start at 0 in 2000 and reached approximetly 18 members in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall contrast: film-club participation remains high, while amateur dramatics declines and table tennis and musical performances rise. You also include approximate starting and ending figures for several activities, and these are broadly consistent with the graph. However, the overview is unclear and incomplete: “the highest figure of film club” does not explain that film-club numbers stayed fairly stable, and the description of amateur dramatics as “third highest” is not clearly connected to the main trends. Some details are imprecise, such as saying martial arts reached 40 at the end, when it finishes at about 36. Make the overview a clear summary of the most important changes, then report accurate comparisons across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the data. Linking phrases such as “To begin with” and “On the other hand” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression is uneven: the overview is difficult to interpret, and the first detail paragraph combines film club and martial arts without a clear comparison. Several transitions are awkward or repetitive, including “after that” and “Furthermore,” while the final paragraph groups two rising activities without explaining their different patterns. Organise the details into clearer comparisons—for example, stable or fluctuating activities versus those that changed substantially—and use linking words only where they express a precise relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “decreased,” “increased,” and “reached,” so the reader can generally understand the trends being described. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “highest figure of film club,” “fell down,” and “it was stood at.” Repeated use of “figure” and “members” also makes the account less precise; “participant numbers” or “the total” would be more suitable in context. Spelling errors such as “verious,” “noteable,” “beggin,” and “approximetly” are noticeable and reduce clarity. Build a reliable set of trend verbs and collocations, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a contrast beginning “While” and a sentence describing the decline in amateur dramatics. However, complex constructions are often incomplete or faulty, and frequent errors make some relationships difficult to follow. For example, “While, martial arts figure was fluctuated” has an incorrect verb pattern, and “it was stood at again 35 members” is not grammatically controlled. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “stood 5 member in 2020.” Practise forming accurate past-tense sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use shorter sentences when a longer structure becomes difficult to control.

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