Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The linear representation iullstrates the information related to the number of participants at one social centre in Melbourne,Australia for 2000 to 2020. In 2000,number of participants, by Film culb had around 60.Moreover, there was steady drop of 3.However,it had sharp rise to 65 in 2015. but it sowly inreased in follwings years. In 2005, the number of participants in Musical performances. Moreover, there was a steady rise of 10 in 2010. However, it sowly increased in the folwing years. In 2000, the number of participants in Table tennis had a 15. But it had seatdy rise of 5 in 2005. however, it

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and mentions some relevant series, including the film club, musical performances and table tennis. However, it reports only a small part of the information and gives no clear overview of the main trends. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the film club falls gradually from about 64 to 60 by 2010, rather than showing a “sharp rise” in 2015, and the table-tennis description stops before its substantial later growth is covered. Martial arts and amateur dramatics are not discussed. The response is also 95 words, below the required 150, which leaves the task substantially incomplete. Select the key overall patterns and compare all five activities using accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic chronological sequence, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “But” show an attempt to connect information. Nevertheless, the response does not develop into a clear, complete report: it has no distinct overview or paragraph structure, and the final table-tennis sentence breaks off at “however, it”. Repeated transitions do not always express a clear relationship between the figures, while the shifts between activities make the progression difficult to follow. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and grouped detail paragraphs. Use linking words only where they accurately show contrast or continuation, and complete each comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “steady drop,” “sharp rise,” and “steady rise,” so the reader can recognise the intended topic and trends. However, the range is narrow and several spelling errors reduce clarity, such as “iullstrates,” “culb,” “sowly,” and “folwing.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, including “the number of participants, by Film culb” and “had a 15.” Use standard activity names and precise trend language, for example, “the film club’s figure” and “stood at approximately 16.” Proofreading spelling and choosing natural collocations would make the data easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, including contrast clauses beginning with “However” and “But.” Some basic meaning is understandable, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Articles and sentence construction are problematic in phrases such as “In 2000,number of participants” and “the number of participants in Table tennis had a 15”; the latter also lacks a clear grammatical structure for reporting a figure. Punctuation and capitalisation are uneven, with missing spaces after commas and “but” beginning a sentence in lowercase. Practise complete, accurate reporting patterns such as “The figure for table tennis was about 16 in 2000, but it rose to 20 by 2005.”

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