Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart illustrate the data regarding the total number of participants for different social activities from year 2000 to 2020 in the city of melbourne,Australia.

Overall,the chart explain about five types of major activities named as Film club,Martial arts,Amateure dramatics,Table tennis and Musical instruments.The major shift that can be seen are in Table tennis and Amateure dramatics.Table tennis sudden increase in the number of participants can be seen from 2010 to 2020 while in amature dramatics the graph line of number of participants show sudden decline from year 2010.

Furthermore,if explain regarding the unusual shift in number of participant the participants of table tennis start from 15 in the year 2000 and then gradually increase to 20 in the year 2010 but there show the sudden shift in graph from 2010 to 2020 as the number rises to 55 participants.Similarly,if we look upon ameture dramatics the number of participant gradually increase from 25 to 29 from year 2000 to 2005 and then show sharp decline from year 2005 to 2020 and number reaches only on 5 in last year.The number of participant in Amateur dramatics and table tennis are same in the year 2010.While if have a look upon musical performances there are zero participants in first five year and from 2005 to 2010 the number reaches to 10 and from 2010 to 2020 the number gradually increases to 15.

Moreover, the participant of film club are highest in number in year 2000 the number of participant are 65 then gradually decreases to 60 in year 2010 and from 2010 the total number of participant gradually increases and reached 70 in the year 2020.Similarly the number of participant show multiple shifts in its participant firstly in the year 2000 total participants are 35 then in next five year gradually decreases to 30 and then from 2005 to 2010 it increases to total number of 40 and then gradually decreases in nxt five year and reaches to 35 and in last five year from 2015 to 2020 again rise at 38.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main contrasting trends: table tennis rises markedly, amateur dramatics declines, and film club remains the largest activity. Most figures are broadly consistent with the chart, including the approximate starting and ending values for these series. However, the overview is not fully accurate: film club peaks at about 66 in 2020, not 70, and martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s rather than reaching 40. The statement that amateur dramatics and table tennis are the same in 2010 is also incorrect: they are approximately 20 and 20, so this comparison is accurate, but the description of musical performances as reaching 15 in 2020 understates the chart’s roughly 18. Covering all five activities more evenly and checking key figures would make the report more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs describing trends, and it generally groups related activities together. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore” and “Moreover” help signal movement between sections. However, progression is sometimes mechanical, with repeated openings such as “if we look upon” and “the number of participant,” and several long sentences combine multiple years and changes without clear punctuation. The overview also lists the activities rather than sharply summarising the most important comparisons. Use clearer topic sentences and divide the detailed comparisons into shorter, logically ordered sentences; this would make the relationships between trends easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “decline,” “increase,” “gradually” and “sharp decline,” so the reader can understand the main movements. There is some variety in describing change, but word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or repetitive. For example, “unusual shift” is not a natural description of a notable trend, “the graph line of number of participants” is awkward, and “Musical instruments” misnames the chart category, which is “musical performances.” Spellings such as “Amateure,” “amature” and “ameture” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, conventional reporting phrases and check activity names carefully; this will improve clarity and give your vocabulary more flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “as,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to read. Examples include “The chart illustrate,” “the chart explain,” and “the number of participant are,” where subject–verb agreement and plural forms are not controlled. Several clauses are joined without suitable punctuation, as in “there show the sudden shift in graph from 2010 to 2020 as the number rises.” Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses; also check agreement and punctuation when editing each sentence.

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