Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph compares the data on the number of contestants for various activity at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, film club accounted for the most popular activity among the attendees. While the number of members in table tennis activity were lowest in fugure at the begninning, but this figure saw the most dramatic growth over the period. Amateur dramatics decreased after five years. Moreover, martial arts flactuated over the time frame.

In 2000, film club stood at roughly 65 number of participants, this figure fell to 60 members by 2010, but in 2020 increased slightly at 66 members. in contrast, te number of participants of table tennis accounted for 26 in 2000, te number of participants decreased and reached at 20 in 2010. However, it then

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies several relevant features, including film club’s leading position, table tennis’s strong growth, and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the account is only partial and contains a major data error: table tennis began at about 16 participants, not 26, and it rose to 20 by 2010 rather than declining from 26. The response also ends mid-sentence (“However, it then”), so the later rise to 54 and the trends in martial arts and musical performances are not reported. The overview is present but does not adequately summarise the full set of changes. The response is 17 words below the required minimum; develop the comparisons and complete the report to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: an introduction is followed by an overview and then a paragraph with figures, and linking phrases such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “However” help signal relationships. Nevertheless, progression is limited because the final paragraph stops abruptly at “However, it then,” leaving the table-tennis comparison unfinished and the remaining activities unaddressed. Some connections are also awkward or repetitive, as in “While … but,” where two contrasting structures are combined. Grouping the main upward trends together and the declining or fluctuating trends together would create a clearer progression. Complete each comparison and use transitions only where they accurately express the relationship between the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “fluctuated,” “dramatic growth,” and “decreased,” so the reader can recognise the intended subject. However, the range is limited and several choices or spelling errors reduce precision: “contestants” is not the natural term for people taking part in activities, “various activity” is incorrectly formed, and “lowest in fugure” is unclear. There are also repeated references to “number of participants” and “figure,” which make the description less concise. Use accurate activity-related terms and vary expressions for changes, such as “rose,” “fell,” and “remained stable.” Check spelling carefully, particularly in key overview statements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, but errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. For example, “between 2000 to 2020” uses an incorrect preposition pattern, while “While … but” creates a faulty contrast structure. The sentence beginning “In 2000, film club stood…” joins two independent clauses with only a comma, and “increased slightly at 66” has an unclear grammatical relationship between the verb and figure. There are also errors in articles, plurals, and agreement, as in “various activity” and “the number … were lowest.” Practise writing complete, controlled sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement and punctuation, and avoid starting a new sentence with a lowercase letter.

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