Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates ratio of volunteers in five different activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, it is immediately clear that film club had highest the highest number of participants through out the period. In contrast, the ratio for amateur dramatics plummeted substantially reaching 2020. Table tennis that started in year 2005 had growing popularity each year.

In 2000, the number of participants for film club was 65 more than any other. This number slightly dropped till 2010 and was recorded 60 after that it kept rising and reached 67 in 2020. For film club members were 26 in 2000 it observed a small increase in next five years and was recorded 29 in 2005. The ratio of participants fell significantly and reached 6 in 2020.

Table tennis on the other hand was at 36 in 2000 its number oscillated in next years and was observed same 36 in 2020. Furthermore, Table tennis only attained 15 members at start after a slight increase reached 20 in 2010 then the ratio surged in next years and in 2020 it was at 52. Musical performances was started in 2005 with no members but with time its popularity kept increasing and in 2020 its participants were 19.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several important patterns, including the film club’s consistently high participation, the sharp decline in amateur dramatics, and the strong rise in table tennis. However, the report contains major inaccuracies and confusing descriptions that limit how fully it represents the graph. For example, you say table tennis began in 2005, although it had participants in 2000, and you describe martial arts as “Table tennis” in the paragraph beginning “Table tennis on the other hand,” giving its figures to the wrong activity. The overview also omits the rise in musical performances and the substantial growth of table tennis. To improve, check each series against the graph and give a concise overview of the main contrasting trends before supporting it with accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs containing details. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “Furthermore” help signal relationships between points. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the activity labels and figures become mixed. In particular, the paragraph starting “Table tennis on the other hand” first describes martial arts, then switches to table tennis without clearly marking the change. The earlier sentence “For film club members were 26” also makes the reference unclear. Organise the details by activity or by contrasting trends, and use clear topic sentences and references so readers can track which figures belong to each series.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “plummeted substantially,” “slightly dropped,” “oscillated,” and “surged.” These choices show an attempt to vary language rather than repeat basic terms. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate, however: “ratio of volunteers” does not describe the graph’s participant numbers, and “reaching 2020” is not a natural way to describe a decline. “Had growing popularity each year” is also imprecise, since table tennis did not rise at every interval. Use standard chart language consistently, such as “number of participants,” “fell to,” and “increased markedly,” and check that each trend verb matches the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and longer sentences, and the overall meaning is often recoverable. However, errors in sentence construction, articles, and punctuation recur. For example, “film club had highest the highest number” contains a duplicated phrase and a missing article, while “For film club members were 26 in 2000 it observed a small increase” is not a complete, clearly structured sentence. Several clauses run together without appropriate punctuation, as in “was recorded 60 after that it kept rising.” Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences and joining clauses with full stops or suitable conjunctions. Also check article use and sentence boundaries during proofreading.

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