Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph provides information on the quantity of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbournr, Autralia between 2000 to 2020

overall, film club remains the most popular activity.table tenes saw a dramatic increase,while amateur dramtics declined. Musical performances appeared after 2000 and grew slightly.

In 2000 the amount of participants in film club was almost 65 which slightly decreased between 2000 to 2005 after that its incresed slightly and reaced to almost 67 by the end of 2020.now lets talk about Martial arts which shows fluctuation in all over the time in 2000 its stand on 36 people after 5 years its declind to 31 and thhen raised to 38 in 2010 after 5 years its decreased little bit to 37and then remains almost same in the middle of 2015 to 2020.

Amateur dramtics grow a bit from 2000 to 20005 from 25 to 29 then declind marginally from 29 to 19 in the middle of 2005 to 2010 the its declind sharply from 19 to almost 7 between 2010 to 2020.now lets talk about Tble tenis which shows a massive raise in all over the map in 200 its stand on17 but as it reached to 2005 the amount of people was 19 then its almost constant between 2005 to 2010 after its climbed sharply to 53 in 2020. And Musical performances start in 2005 on that time it was a 0 participants but after 5 years its raised to 11 people after that its modertely increased to 18 in the end of 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main patterns accurately: film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises sharply, amateur dramatics falls, and musical performances grow from zero. The overview is relevant, and most figures are close to the chart, including the film club’s end value and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: musical performances began in 2010, not 2005, and martial arts falls to about 34 in 2015 rather than 37. The table-tennis account also omits its substantial rise by 2015. This covers the task well overall, but some series are reported more fully than others; clearer, more precise comparisons would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an overview followed by paragraphs describing the activities, and the reader can generally follow the chronological account. However, progression is weakened by the repeated conversational transitions “now lets talk about” and by long sentences that combine several years and figures. Some links are unclear, such as “after that its climbed sharply to 53 in 2020,” which skips the 2015 value. Paragraphing could group related trends more deliberately, and punctuation between sentences needs attention. Use a concise overview, then organise the details into clear groups—for example, rising or stable activities and declining activities—and use time markers consistently.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fluctuation,” “dramatic increase,” “declined sharply,” and “remains the most popular,” which helps describe trends. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings reduce clarity: “quantity of participants” is less natural than “number of participants,” while “massive raise” and “climbed sharply” are imprecise or awkward in this context. Errors such as “table tenes,” “dramtics,” and “modertely” also make the writing less polished. Aim for accurate, varied trend language and check spelling carefully. Terms such as “rose,” “fell,” “remained stable,” and “fluctuated” can describe the data more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with time clauses, so there is some variety. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors in tense, sentence boundaries, articles, and agreement occur throughout. For example, “in 2000 its stand on 36 people” needs a past-tense verb and a clearer construction, while “after 5 years its declind” also has an incorrect verb form. Several sentences run together, as in the film-club description, and capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas with accurate clauses. Consistent past-tense reporting and full stops would make the figures easier to understand.

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