Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph below explains by providing information of number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall by comparing, the highest number of participants was seen in film club in the year 2020, sudden decline was seen in Amateur dramatics lowest number of participants was seen in the same year. On the other hand, there are no musical performances in 2000 but later on in 2005 it started and then rises by passing years. The other three Table tennis, Amateur dramatics and Martial arts was seen intially at equal distance at 15, 25 and 35 respectively. At the end of 2020, different flactuations were seen in which Table tennis shows dramatic increase, a sudden decline was seen in Amateur dramatics and in Martial arts continous rise and fall was seen by passing years.

Overall, the graph depicts that highest number was seen in film club and lowest number was seen in Amateur dramatics.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main extremes correctly: the film club has the most participants by 2020, while amateur dramatics falls to the lowest level. You also note table tennis’s strong rise and the later appearance of musical performances. However, the account is only partial and some details are inaccurate: musical performances began in 2010, not 2005, and martial arts fluctuated rather than showing a continuous rise and fall as a clear overall trend. The opening comparison of the three activities as being at “equal distance” is unclear, and key changes are not supported with accurate figures. The response is 146 words, four words below the required minimum; 18 words copied from the prompt are excluded from the count. Develop the overview and select a few precise comparisons to complete the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an opening, a paragraph describing broad trends, and a concluding overview, so there is some attempt to organise the information. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the second paragraph combines several comparisons and trends in a long, loosely connected sequence. Phrases such as “On the other hand” and “At the end of 2020” do not always show a clear relationship between the points that follow, and the final paragraph repeats the claim that film club was highest and amateur dramatics lowest without adding a new summary. Grouping the activities by trend—for example, stable or fluctuating series versus those that rose or fell—would make the comparisons easier to follow and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a line graph, including “dramatic increase,” “sudden decline,” and “fluctuations,” and the activity names are generally clear. However, the range is limited and several choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For example, “explains by providing information of number” is not a natural way to introduce the graph, while “equal distance” does not clearly describe the starting figures. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “intially,” “flactuations,” and “continous.” Aim for precise trend language and check spelling carefully; use terms such as “participants,” “rose,” “fell,” and “remained relatively stable” in accurate combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, but complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For instance, “The other three Table tennis, Amateur dramatics and Martial arts was seen” has an incomplete structure and incorrect subject–verb agreement; “in Martial arts continous rise and fall was seen” also lacks a clear grammatical subject and article. The opening sentence, “The graph below explains by providing information of number,” is similarly difficult to parse. There are also problems with punctuation, including the extra space before “sudden decline” and the run-on sequence of trends in the second paragraph. Practise building clear sentences with a subject and verb, and use accurate agreement and articles.

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