Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the line graph provides information about the numbers of participants for five different activities at one social centre in melbourne, australia from 2000 to 2020 .

Overall, the graph shows film club activity had the highest numbers of participants over the period . tennis table shows a dramatical increase after 2010 , while musical performance sstarted to increase significantly in 2005 to the end of the period.

Film club has fluctuate between 60 to 70 nembers of participants , whereas amateur dramatics provides a significant decrease after 2005 . musical performances goes up

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a broad overview, correctly noting that the film club remained the most popular activity and that table tennis rose markedly. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it gives almost no supporting figures and stops before describing most of the series. The claim that musical performances increased significantly from 2005 is inaccurate, as participation stayed at zero until 2010; the rise began then and was gradual. You also say film club numbers fluctuated between 60 and 70, but they stayed within roughly 60–66. The response contains 84 words, below the required 150, which leaves the key trends and comparisons undeveloped. Add a complete account of the main changes and relevant figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic structure: an opening sentence, an overview introduced by “Overall,” and a brief attempt to describe individual trends. This gives the reader some sense of the response’s purpose. However, the ideas do not progress into a complete summary, and the final phrase, “musical performances goes up,” is unfinished and disconnected from the preceding point. Comparisons between activities are largely absent, while the short, separate statements do not form a developed sequence. Use clear paragraphs for the overview and key details, then connect trends with simple linking expressions such as “by contrast” or “meanwhile.” Ensure each sentence is complete and that the response moves through the main changes in a logical order.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “increase,” “decrease,” and “over the period,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which makes parts of the description awkward: “tennis table” should be “table tennis,” and “a dramatical increase” is not the natural form. “Film club activity” is also less precise than referring to the number of participants in the film club. Spelling errors such as “nembers” and “sstarted” further reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate trend phrases and activity names, and check spelling and word forms before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both a complex sentence with “whereas” and simpler statements, and the main subject of the chart can usually be understood. However, the range is limited, and errors recur in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence completion. For example, “Film club has fluctuate” needs a correct verb form, while “musical performances goes up” has a subject–verb agreement problem and does not develop into a complete description. The opening also needs more accurate sentence punctuation and capitalisation. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “The number of participants in the film club fluctuated slightly.” Then check tense and agreement consistently.

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