Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph tells the number of participants in different activities at one social Centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the graph shows the different number of people taking part in in different activities Musical performances, Table tennis, Amateur dramatics, Martial arts, and Film club for the time period of 2000 to 2020.

From 2000 to 2005 the number of performers in music were zero afterward in 2010 the no. of instrumentalists were more then 10 then the number of singers start increasing rapidly then in 2020 the no. of vocalists were almost 20. Table tennis players in 2000 to 2005 were almost same 15 to 17 then the number of contestants were consistent till 2010 subsequently there is a huge increase in competitors in 2015 the number of participants were 37 and in 2020 the number were more than 50. Amateur dramatics faces huge downfall after 2005 afterward in 2020 the number was 5.

The number of martial artists in 2000 were 35 then decreases to 32 in 2005. Martial arts faces up and downs from 2010 to 2020. The number of participants in film club were nearly same but in 2005 the number performers decreases slightly

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify all five activities and report several important patterns, including the rise in table tennis, the decline in amateur dramatics, and the relatively high film-club figures. However, the overview mostly repeats that the graph shows participation in different activities rather than summarising the main contrasts. Some details are also unclear or inaccurate: musical performances rise gradually to about 18, not rapidly to almost 20, and table tennis was already around 20 in 2005 and remained there in 2010. The film-club trend is described only as nearly unchanged, without noting its slight dip followed by a rise. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the leading, rising and declining activities, then report the key figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it begins with an introduction and overview, then groups musical performances, table tennis and amateur dramatics before discussing martial arts and the film club. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the overview does not establish a clear progression, and the main body is largely one long paragraph containing several trends. Linking words such as “then,” “afterward” and “subsequently” are repeated, sometimes making the sequence feel mechanical; the final film-club point also ends abruptly. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and grouped comparisons, and connect changes with clearer contrasts, such as “by comparison” or “while,” so relationships between activities are easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “increase,” “downfall,” “consistent” and “up and downs,” and the activity names are generally clear. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this chart. Participants in musical performances are called “instrumentalists,” “singers” and “vocalists,” although the graph gives no such detail; “contestants” and “competitors” are also unsuitable for table-tennis participants. “Faces huge downfall” is an awkward collocation, and “up and downs” is imprecise. Prefer neutral chart language such as “participants,” “rose,” “remained stable” and “declined sharply.” This would make the descriptions more precise and avoid unsupported assumptions about who took part.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences to describe changes over time, but complex sentences are often difficult to follow because clauses are joined without reliable punctuation or grammatical control. For example, “then the number of singers start increasing rapidly then in 2020…” contains a tense/agreement problem and an unclear sequence, while “The number of martial artists in 2000 were 35 then decreases” shifts between past and present and has subject–verb disagreement. There are also missing articles and awkward sentence boundaries, as in “in 2005 the number performers decreases slightly.” Use the past tense consistently for the completed period, check singular subjects such as “the number,” and divide long sequences into shorter, correctly punctuated sentences.

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