Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The kine graph illustrates the number of participants in five different activities at a spcial in Melbourne, Australia,between2000 and2020.
overall, the film club remained the most popular activity thoughout the period, while table tennis expirienceed the most significant growth. In contrast, participaion in amateur dramatics decline considerly. Martial arts remained relatively stable, whereas musical performance became increasingly popular.
In 2000, the film club had approximately 65 participants, making it the most popular activity. this figure decreased slightly to around 59 in 2010, and then it recovers to about 64 participants in 2020. the number of people participating in martial arts fluctuated moderately, starting at around 36 in 2000 and ending at approximattely 34 in 2020.
Table tennis shhowed a remarkable increase over the period. it began with around 15 participants in 2000 and rose gradually to 20 participants in 2010. After that, the figure increased sharply, reaching approximately 35 in 2015 and over with 50 participants by 2020, making it the second most popular activity.
by contrast, amteur dramtics started a about 25 participants in 2000 and fell gradually to around 20 in 2010. then it declined further to approximately 5 by 2020. finally, musical performance had no parrticipants in 2000 and 2005 but number rose to around 10 in 2010 and reached approximtely 16 in 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5
The response selects the main patterns accurately and gives a clear overview: the film club stays the most popular, table tennis grows markedly, and amateur dramatics declines. The reported figures are generally consistent with the chart, including the film club’s slight dip and recovery, martial arts’ fluctuations, and musical performances’ rise from zero. The comparison that table tennis becomes the second most popular activity by 2020 is also well supported. This is a well-focused summary with relevant detail across all five activities. To strengthen it further, report the final musical-performance figure more precisely (about 18, rather than 16) and make the overview’s comparisons slightly more exact; for example, table tennis overtakes martial arts by 2015.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0
The response is organised into a clear introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. Its progression is easy to follow: the first detail paragraph covers the film club and martial arts, while the second groups the remaining activities. Linking expressions such as “In contrast,” “whereas,” “After that,” and “By contrast” help signal comparisons and changes over time. The main limitation is that some transitions and sentence openings feel repetitive or abrupt, particularly the repeated use of “then” and “finally.” Capitalisation after full stops is also inconsistent, which interrupts the otherwise clear presentation. For a more polished progression, vary the ways you connect time points and comparisons, and ensure each paragraph begins and ends with consistent sentence-level formatting.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The response uses a suitable range of trend and comparison vocabulary, including “remained relatively stable,” “fluctuated moderately,” “remarkable increase,” and “declined further.” These choices communicate the main patterns clearly. However, frequent spelling errors and some inaccurate word forms reduce precision and make the writing look less controlled: examples include “kine graph,” “spcial,” “expirienceed,” “participaion,” and “approximtely.” Some phrasing is also awkward, such as “increased sharply … and over with 50 participants.” Use standard chart language and proofread carefully so that spelling and collocation do not distract from the accurate information. A more precise vocabulary range is already emerging, but it needs more reliable execution.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response attempts a mix of simple and more complex structures, including contrast clauses with “while” and “whereas,” and time-sequence sentences using “After that.” Most of the intended meaning remains understandable. However, errors in sentence boundaries, tense consistency, articles, and punctuation are frequent enough to limit accuracy. For example, “this figure decreased … and then it recovers” shifts tense within a past-time description, while “but number rose” is missing an article. Several sentences begin with lowercase letters after full stops, and the final sentence lacks closing punctuation. Practise maintaining the past tense throughout and checking articles and sentence boundaries. More accurate control of these basic patterns would make the varied sentence forms more effective.
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