Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the provide information about different activities of participants on the base of numbers at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between years of 2000 to 2020.

It is significant that the number of participants in Melbourne, Australia in activity of table tennis are rise up to increase in last ten years. However, participants in activity of amateur dramatics falls down as well as these years.

It shows that the difference between these five categories depends on involved people. Attendees such as represents less interest in musical performances in starting but in 2005 they start to interest and day by day increased almost up to 18 in 2020. The other two activities that participants at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia as well as film club and martial arts are up and down almost starting to end are same about their numbers of involved people. In the end, table tennis show more numbers of participants and rise up to increases 54 numbers between 2010 to 2020. On other side, numbers of participants in amateur dramatics category fall down starting point 28 and at end point is 5 at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period [redacted phone].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify two important overall movements: table-tennis participation rises markedly, while amateur dramatics declines. You also mention the film club, martial arts and musical performances, so the response is relevant to the chart. However, the summary is only partial: it gives little clear comparison of the five activities and does not establish the film club as the consistently most popular activity. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: musical performances began at zero and first had participants in 2010, not 2005; table tennis rose from 20 in 2010 to 54 in 2020, rather than increasing by 54; and amateur dramatics ended at about 6, not 5. Select the main contrasts and report the figures and time periods precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an introduction to broad trends and then to examples, and words such as “However” and “In the end” signal relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview and supporting details are not clearly separated, and several sentences combine unrelated points. For example, the sentence beginning “The other two activities” shifts between film club and martial arts without clearly stating their trends, while “It shows that the difference…” does not introduce a specific comparison. Use a clear overview paragraph followed by two organised detail paragraphs, grouping similar trends together. Make references explicit so readers can readily identify which activity each statement describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “categories,” “increased” and “fall,” and the reader can generally identify the activities being discussed. However, the range is limited and several repeated or unnatural expressions make the report less precise, such as “rise up to increase,” “falls down,” “involved people” and “start to interest.” Some word choices also obscure the intended meaning, as in “Attendees such as represents less interest.” Aim for standard data-reporting collocations and vary the verbs used to describe change. For instance, describe numbers as rising, declining, remaining stable or fluctuating, and use “participation” or “participant numbers” rather than “involved people.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a contrast introduced by “However” and a time clause beginning “between years of 2000 to 2020.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms and agreement frequently make the meaning harder to follow. Examples include “The line graph illustrates the provide information,” “table tennis are rise,” and “table tennis show more numbers.” Articles and prepositions are also often missing or incorrectly used, as in “in activity of table tennis” and “at end point.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add time phrases and contrasts. Check that each subject agrees with its verb and that past-tense descriptions remain consistent.

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