Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates the total numbers of participants for various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, the film club fluctuates and, started from 65 number of participants and droopped to 60 and then in 2020 edge up to 67. Amatuer dramatics has the lowest number of participants started from 17 number of participants and reduce to 4 number of participnts in 2020.

Musical performances has 0 number of paricipants in 2000 till 2005 and after 2005 the number of participants rose up to 15 number of participants. Martial arts go up and down every year started from 38 number of participants and ends up on the same number.

Table tennis started from 15 number of participants and fluctuates till 2010 and after 2010 the number of participants increased to 55 number of participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify all five activities and report several broad trends, including the film club’s slight dip and recovery, the decline in amateur dramatics, and table tennis’s strong late rise. However, the response is short of the required 150 words, and the overview is not sufficiently clear or accurate: calling the film club’s movement a fluctuation misses that it remains broadly stable, while saying martial arts “ends up on the same number” is imprecise (it begins at about 36 and ends at about 36). Some figures are also inaccurate, such as amateur dramatics falling from about 26 to 6 rather than 17 to 4. Develop the key comparisons more fully and check figures against the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction is followed by an overview and then comments on the activities. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow, and the use of “Overall” and “after 2010” helps signal relationships. However, the overview combines several separate trends in a long, crowded paragraph, and the final paragraph lists activities without a clear comparison between them. Repeated phrasing such as “number of participants” also makes the progression feel mechanical. Grouping the main trends—for example, stable or fluctuating activities versus those that rose or declined—and using clearer sentence boundaries would make the organisation more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “fluctuates,” “increased,” and “rose,” so the reader can understand the general trends. However, the range is limited and several phrases are unnatural or repetitive, particularly “started from 65 number of participants” and “rose up to 15 number of participants.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “droopped,” “Amatuer,” and “participnts,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for concise chart language and vary the verbs used to describe movement. For example, “began at,” “fell to,” “remained stable,” and “climbed to” are more natural choices in this context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response mainly uses simple present-tense statements and attempts to connect ideas with “and” and “after,” but the range of sentence structures is limited. Frequent errors affect accuracy, as in “the film club fluctuates and, started from 65” and “Martial arts go up and down every year started from 38.” These clauses need clearer grammatical links and consistent tense. There are also problems with articles, number expressions, and sentence construction in phrases such as “has 0 number of participants.” Use past-tense verbs consistently to describe the period, and practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “The figure began at about 36 and ended at a similar level.”

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