Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph compares the numbers of participants in various activities at a social centre in Melbourne between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, the film club was the activity with most number of participants, followed by martial arts. Musical performances were the least attracted activity in the beginning, which steadily rose over the period. The number of participants in table tennis and amateur dramatics intersected at one point after which both the activities followed the opposite trend.

In 2000, the film club had the highest participants, at 65, in 2010, the numbers gradually decreased to 60. By 2020, participation i film club inclined to more than 65. Regarding Martial arts, figures for 2000 were nearly 46, which rose to approximately 39 in 2010 and by 2020, it stayed less.

Musical performances attracted the least numbers of participants, in first two years, there were zero participants for this activity, which steadily increased to 10 in 2010, following the same pattern and reached nearly 19 bu 2020. Amateur dramatics and table tennis followed similar pattern in 2000 and 2005, participation numbers in these activites intersects at 20 in 2010, after that table tennis steadily rose to nearly 55 and amateur dramatics followed a downward trend, at less than 10 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main series and provide an overview of the broad patterns: film club remains highest, musical performances rise from zero, table tennis grows, and amateur dramatics declines. These are relevant features, and the response covers the chart as a whole. However, some figures and comparisons are inaccurate: martial arts begins at about 36, not 46, and ends at roughly 36 rather than simply “stayed less.” The claim that table tennis and amateur dramatics intersect at 20 in 2010 is also incorrect; their values are about 20 and 20 at that point, but the earlier pattern and the later divergence need clearer reporting. To strengthen the response, give more precise comparisons and describe the key changes without ambiguous claims such as “both the activities followed the opposite trend.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs grouping the activities. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow, and phrases such as “Regarding Martial arts” and “after that” help signal shifts. The overview also gives the reader a useful sense of the main trends. However, some links are unclear or mechanically phrased, particularly “The number of participants in table tennis and amateur dramatics intersected at one point after which both the activities followed the opposite trend.” The later paragraph repeats the overview’s points rather than developing comparisons consistently, and the martial-arts sentence is difficult to interpret. Use clearer references and organise the details around contrasting trends, while ensuring each sentence connects unambiguously to the figures being discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of chart vocabulary, including “gradually decreased,” “steadily increased,” “downward trend,” and “attracted,” so the main information is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “participation numbers.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “most number of participants,” “least attracted activity,” “participation … inclined,” and “figures … stayed less.” Spelling slips such as “activites” and “bu” also reduce accuracy. Aim for standard, precise expressions for describing data, such as “had the highest number,” “was the least popular,” and “rose to.” This would make the vocabulary more natural and improve precision without requiring more elaborate wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “which” and time phrases such as “By 2020.” Most of the intended meaning can be understood, but some grammatical errors recur and occasionally make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “in 2010, the numbers gradually decreased to 60” is attached awkwardly to the preceding clause, while “participation i film club inclined” has an incomplete construction. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and agreement in phrases such as “the highest participants” and “both the activities.” Use complete, well-punctuated sentences and check that each subject has a suitable verb and noun phrase. Greater control of these patterns would make your complex sentences more reliable.

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