Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph illustrates the data of the total participants for different activites at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, the number of participant has increased in some activities, while few activities experienced a decline in their participants. Amateur dramatics saw a decline in their participants, while table tennis participant has increased over the period of time.

In 2000, the number of participants in amateur dramatics was 26 which was peaked in 2005 at 30, then experienced a steady declines, reaching below 10 by 2020. Total number of participant in table tennis was 17 in 2020, which remain steady till 2010, and was sharply increased to 55 till 2020. Martial arts has 37 participant at the beginning of the time frame and remained the same till 2020 with a slight fluctuation in 2005 and 2015.

Musical performances has no particiants in 2000, by 2005 it started growing and reached 18 participants by 2020. However the Film club has highest number of participants throughout the time frames, starting from 63 and remained steady till the 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall contrast: amateur dramatics declined, while table tennis rose sharply, and you note that film club remained the largest activity. These are relevant features, and several figures are close to the chart, including amateur dramatics at 26 initially and musical performances reaching about 18. However, some details are misreported: table tennis was about 16 in 2000 and 54 in 2020, not 17 in 2020; it rose from 20 in 2010 rather than remaining steady from 2000. Amateur dramatics peaked at about 28 in 2005, not 30. The film-club figures also fluctuated slightly rather than remaining steady. The overview is useful, but more accurate comparisons and clearer reporting of the major changes would make the summary more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, moving from an introduction and overview to paragraphs describing the activities. This makes the main trends easy to locate, and transitions such as “Overall” and “However” help signal relationships. The organisation is not fully effective, though: the final paragraph combines musical performances and film club without a clear comparison, while the earlier detail paragraph groups three other activities. Some references are also unclear, particularly “which remain steady till 2010,” where the reader must infer that this refers to table tennis. Use more deliberate grouping—for example, rising activities together and declining or fluctuating ones together—and make each pronoun or reference point unmistakable. This would strengthen progression and reduce the slightly list-like feel.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “decline,” “steady,” “fluctuation,” and “sharply increased.” These choices communicate the broad patterns, and the activity names are generally handled clearly. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, however: “the data of the total participants” is awkward, “peaked” is used incorrectly in “was peaked,” and “steady declines” does not fit the intended description. There are also spelling errors such as “activites” and “particiants.” Aim for precise chart language and natural combinations, such as “the number of participants,” “reached a peak,” and “fell steadily.” Varying “participants” with “attendance” where appropriate can also make the account less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “while,” “which,” and “however,” and the overall meaning is usually clear. Some grammatical errors remain, especially with agreement, tense, and sentence construction. For example, “the number of participant has increased” needs plural agreement in “participants” and a consistent past-time form; “Martial arts has 37 participant” also has agreement and plural errors. In “which was peaked,” the passive construction is not grammatical, and “which remain steady” should use a past-tense verb. The sentence beginning “Musical performances has no participants in 2000, by 2005…” joins two clauses with only a comma. Check subject–verb agreement and past-tense consistency, and separate or link clauses correctly.

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