Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the line graph presents distinct activities and their number of participants at one social centre in melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

overall, the number members for flim club and martial arts remain stagnant throughout the given period. in addition to, activities like table tennis and musical performances witnessed tremendous growth . In contrast, amateur dramatics faced sharp downfall for the rest of the given years.

the film and martial arts club experienced flactuation in their number of participants from year 2000 to 2020 indivisulas but showed no major changes. for the flim club the number revolved around roughly 65 members . moreover, the martial arts club remained constant with their numbers.

from year 2000 to 2005 the dramatics club showed no substancial amount of growth ; however, in year 2005 it faced a sustain sharp decend dropping the number to nearly 4 indivisuals for the rest of the year , on the other hand table tennis showed no strong rise from year 2000 to 2010 before , soaring dramatically to its peak of nearly 55 people. the musical performance club started its journey in year 2005 and remained constant with it's groth rate and rising to roughly 15 members.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall patterns: film-club participation stays high, table tennis rises substantially, and amateur dramatics declines. These are relevant features and give the response a clear overview. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear. Martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s rather than remaining constant, and amateur dramatics falls to about 6 by 2020, not “nearly 4” or a figure that applies “for the rest of the year.” Musical performances begin at zero in 2000 and rise from 2010, rather than starting in 2005. The account also gives limited precise comparisons between series. Report the main turning points and end values accurately, and distinguish a stable overall level from small fluctuations to make the summary more complete and clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. The overview usefully groups the rising activities against the declining one, and phrases such as “In contrast” help signal a comparison. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. The final paragraph moves between amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances in a long sentence, while “on the other hand” does not clearly connect the two trends being contrasted. Some linking phrases are also awkward or repetitive, such as “in addition to.” Give each paragraph a clearer focus, use shorter sentences to separate the series, and make references such as “the rest of the year” precise. This would make the overall organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of trend vocabulary, including “fluctuation,” “tremendous growth,” “sharp downfall,” “soaring dramatically” and “peak.” This shows an effort to describe change rather than simply list figures. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for chart reporting: “remained stagnant” and “remained constant” overstate the small fluctuations in the film and martial-arts figures, while “started its journey” is informal. Spelling errors such as “flactuation,” “indivisulas,” “substancial” and “decend” also reduce precision. Aim for standard, concise collocations such as “remained relatively stable,” “declined steadily” and “rose sharply,” and check spelling carefully. More accurate word choice would make your comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at complex sentences, for example the contrast introduced by “however” and the clause beginning “before soaring dramatically.” This gives some variety, but control is inconsistent. There are errors in agreement and sentence construction, as in “the number members … remain stagnant,” and the opening of the detail paragraph, “the film and martial arts club experienced … their number … individuals,” is difficult to parse. The final paragraph contains a run-on structure with several ideas joined by commas, and punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and separate each activity’s trend into its own sentence. More reliable agreement, articles and punctuation would improve readability.

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