Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph compares the information on the number of participants for different activities at single sociaal centre in melbourne, australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, number of participants such as file culb are at the top during the period and martial arts shows some ups and dows.Table tennis dramatical increased, moreover musical performance remaind at lowest level not significally changed in it, while Amateure dranatics drop suddenly in this trend.

In 2000, Film club has 65 number of students it has some fluctuation in this during the period and it minimally grow in 2020 at 68 participants. In contrast, table tenis demonstrate the signifcant change 2010 it reached at 20 students after that it rose sharply at 55 participants in 2020, while matrial arts starting from 38 students it drop at 30 in 2005 after fluctuation it remained same at 38 in 2020.

In general, Amateur dramatics grew minimally 20 to 30 students in 2005after that it has noticable decreased in 2010, it drop sharply at 5 participants in 2020. Lastly, musical performance remained same from 2000 to 2005, In 2005 it rise at 10 participants in 2010 after it increase at 17 number in 2015 and in 2020 it reached its peak at 17 number of participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main activities and give an overview of the broad patterns, including film club’s consistently high participation, table tennis’s strong rise, and amateur dramatics’ decline. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: film club ends at about 66, not 68; martial arts finishes near 36, not 38; and musical performances rise to about 18 by 2020 rather than peaking at 17 in 2015. The overview also says musical performances remained at the lowest level and did not change significantly, although they increase from zero to around 18. Several trends are reported, but the overview and comparisons need more precise selection and reporting of the chart’s key features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the figures. This helps the reader follow the general subject. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to track because several activities and time points are joined in long sentences, such as the sentence beginning “In general, Amateur dramatics…” The linking words “moreover,” “while,” and “Lastly” are used, but some connections are awkward or do not clearly show the relationship between the information. Grouping the rising activities together and the declining or fluctuating ones together would create a clearer progression. Use full stops to separate trends and make each comparison easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of trend vocabulary, including “fluctuation,” “rose sharply,” “remained,” and “decreased,” which is appropriate for describing a line graph. However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent enough to make some phrases difficult to understand: “file culb,” “dows,” “signifcant,” and “noticable” are examples. Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “65 number of students,” “reached at 20 students,” and “not significally changed.” Use the chart’s term “participants” consistently rather than switching to “students,” and learn accurate collocations for describing figures and trends. More precise vocabulary would make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You try to combine information using clauses and contrast, for example, “In contrast, table tenis…” and “while matrial arts…,” but complex sentences are often faulty or run together. Verb forms and agreement are inconsistent: “Film club has 65” and “it drop sharply” should use past forms when describing this completed period, while “number of participants … are” has a singular-plural mismatch. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “at single sociaal centre” and the missing space or punctuation in “2005after.” These recurring errors sometimes make relationships between figures unclear. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build shorter, correctly punctuated sentences before combining them.

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