Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph shows the information about the numbers of candidates in various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, In 2000 the number of participants in film club stand on a highest position. They fluctuate in up and down but also rank on a upward direction. In contrast, Musical performances begin in 2005 they grew up in 10% among the 2010.

In 2000, just over half of the number of members increased upto 65%. Martial arts are started with the percentage of 35%. They rised for some points. In contrast, Martial arts begins with 38% they raised slightly upto 40%. Amateur dramatics numbers of individuals were comparatively declined among 5%. Table tennis the figure were started with mid range of participants with 15% however they saw an upward trend and touch the 50% of total. Lastly, Musical performances was not activley involved in 2000 it start in 2005 but fewer amount of members are involved.

By 2020, around 69% of people were participate in film club and table tennis in 58%. Table tennis surpassing the other activities. martial arts are fluctuate in similar point in 38%. Ameteur and musical performances had the lowest proportion, the number of involments are there almost lesser to other activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main categories and make some relevant comparisons, including film club’s leading position at the start and table tennis’s strong rise. However, several key details are inaccurate or unclear: film club remains broadly stable and ends at about 66, rather than reaching 69; table tennis reaches about 54, not 58; and musical performances first have participants in 2010, not 2005. The overview also misstates the trends, such as saying film club fluctuates upward without clearly describing its stability, and the final comparison does not explain that amateur dramatics falls sharply to the lowest figure. Focus on accurate trends and a clear overview, then support it with selected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and it attempts to group information using phrases such as “In contrast” and “By 2020.” This gives it some organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the middle paragraph repeats or contradicts information: martial arts is described as starting at 35% and then as beginning at 38%, while the timeline for musical performances is unclear. Several linking phrases do not show a clear relationship between ideas, and the final paragraph lists figures without consistently comparing them. Organise the details by clear trends—for example, stable/fluctuating activities versus those that rise or fall—and use references and transitions that make the sequence easy to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “participants,” “upward trend,” “declined,” and “surpassing,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning hard to interpret. For example, “stand on a highest position,” “grew up in 10%,” and “touch the 50% of total” are not natural ways to describe chart values. The repeated use of “percentage” is also unsuitable when the graph reports participant numbers, not proportions. Choose precise terms such as “number,” “figure,” “rose,” and “fell,” and check spelling and word forms, including “amateur” and “actively.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response is divided into paragraphs, but grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in examples such as “the number … stand” and “the figure were started.” Verb forms and tense are also unreliable: “They rised” and “it start in 2005” should use correctly formed past-tense verbs. Sentence boundaries and capitalisation need attention, as in “Overall, In 2000,” while some clauses are incomplete or awkwardly joined. Practise writing clear past-tense sentences with a subject, verb and accurate comparison, then check agreement, articles and punctuation. Greater control of these basic patterns would make your data descriptions much easier to understand.

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