Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graphs illustrates changes in activities of participant in film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances between 2000 and 2020.

In 2000, the number of participants for table tennis stood at 17, compared with 25 particpants for amateur dramatics activities. Table tennis then increased from 19 to 55 by the year 2020, while participants of amateur dramatics activities fell from 25 to nearly 7 by the year 2020.

Meanwhile, martial arts participant's activities remained stable from 2000 to 2020. Similiarly in constrast, people had limited interest in musical performance, showing no one had participated in year 2000 till 2005, and then increased 10 people by 2010 to nearly 19 people in 2020.

However, in 2000 nearly 63 people particpated in film club and people's participation stayed constant from 2000 to 2020.Overall , there was a high partipation of people in film club compared to musical performances which had fewer people interested to see the performance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important patterns, including the sharp rise in table-tennis participation, the decline in amateur dramatics, and the late growth in musical performances. The approximate figures you give for these trends are generally close to the chart. However, the overview is not sufficiently accurate: you say film-club participation “stayed constant,” although it dipped slightly before rising to its highest level, and martial-arts numbers fluctuated rather than remaining stable. The response also gives limited attention to the key comparisons across the period, such as table tennis becoming the second most popular activity by 2020. A clearer overview of the main rises, falls and relative rankings, supported by more precise descriptions of change, would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces the chart, groups table tennis with amateur dramatics, then discusses the other activities. This makes the main information reasonably easy to follow. Some linking is effective, as in “Meanwhile” and “However,” but other transitions are awkward or mechanical. “Similarly in contrast” combines two conflicting signals, and “Overall” is attached directly to the preceding sentence without a space. The final overview also repeats the film-club comparison rather than drawing together the main trends. Use clearer paragraphing and a small number of precise links, and organise the body around contrasting trends or popularity levels to create stronger progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “increased,” “fell,” “remained stable” and “compared with,” so the reader can understand the broad trends. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive: “activities of participant” and “martial arts participant's activities” are unnatural, while “limited interest” interprets participant numbers as public interest. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “particpants,” “Similiarly,” “particpated” and “partipation.” Aim for concise, accurate phrases such as “the number of participants” and “participation in the activity,” and check spelling carefully. More varied language for describing fluctuations and rankings would also help you report the data more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “compared with,” and most of the intended meaning remains understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur. The opening should be “The line graph illustrates,” with singular agreement, and “the number of participants” is more grammatically appropriate than “activities of participant.” In “showing no one had participated in year 2000 till 2005,” the time expression and verb construction are faulty; write, for example, “with no participants in 2000 or 2005.” The sentence about amateur dramatics also lacks a clear verb after “activities.” Review agreement, articles, and complete clause structure, and punctuate sentence boundaries consistently.

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