Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given line chart illustrates the number of individuals visiting a social centre for various activities in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, It is obevious that table tennis, and musical performance activities were surged during the observed time period. Conversely, number of people of Amateur dramatics was plunged, whereas film club, and martial art recreation were fluctuated.

In the initial decade, there was nobody interested in musical performance, but their numbers began to increase in 2005, nd more than 10 person were visiting activity centre in 2010. Moreover, people of martial arts got declined to 30 from 35, but, again increased to initial numbers. In contrast, Amateur dramatics proportion grew initially, but fell abruptly from 30 to 20. Film club figures got declined to 60.

In the subsequent decade, musical performers were more than 20 in 2020, and Amateur dramatics continued to decrease, which were less than 10 in 2020. However, table tennis players ratio had increased exponentially, to 50 approximately. Film club visitors had soared slightly to 70 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important patterns, including the sharp rise in table tennis, the decline in amateur dramatics, and the relative stability of martial arts. The overview also recognises that film club participation changes only modestly. However, some details are inaccurate: musical performances first appear in 2010, not 2005, and reach about 18 in 2020 rather than more than 20. Film club rises to about 66, not 70, while martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s rather than falling to 30. The response addresses the task, but some trends and figures are reported less fully or precisely than others. Check each series against the graph and use approximate values consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the periods. This gives the reader a coherent route through the information, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “In the subsequent decade” help signal relationships. At times, however, the organisation is mechanical or the references are unclear. For example, “their numbers” does not clearly identify the participants in musical performances, and the second body paragraph groups several trends without a consistent comparison. Organise the details by activity or by clear time periods, and use explicit subjects such as “the number of musical-performance participants” to make connections easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “declined,” “increased,” “fell abruptly,” and “soared slightly.” These choices show an attempt to vary your language rather than repeat one verb throughout. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “activities were surged,” “Amateur dramatics was plunged,” and “people of martial arts got declined.” “Ratio” is also unsuitable for the number of table-tennis participants, and “person” should be plural when referring to more than one participant. Spelling errors such as “obevious” and “nd” further reduce accuracy. Choose standard chart-description phrases and check spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrast clauses with “whereas” and “but,” and most of the intended meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless recur. In the overview, “It is obevious that…” has incorrect capitalisation after the comma and an incorrect sentence form; “activities were surged” also uses an incorrect passive construction. Other examples include “there was nobody interested” and “which were less than 10,” where the phrasing or agreement is faulty. Punctuation around conjunctions is sometimes awkward, as in “but, again increased.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and past-tense trend structures, while keeping complex sentences controlled.

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